Life

When I cry thats

When the rain falls

When I love that's when

The sun shines

When I hurt that's when

Time flies

When I breathe that's when

The wind blows

When I fall that's when

Night crawls

When I rise that's when

The morning's here

When I hate that's when

The clouds come in

But when I die

The rain falls

Once again.

Reviews

[Dillon Cotter]

Nicely written. Great feeling and emotion.

-Will

[Dead lover]

Thats beautiful.

[snapstache]

Fantastic!!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I enjoyed reading this.
Great Job

[PhantomDancer]

Simple but highly effective. Short uncluttered lines are often better than long wordy sentences. Well written!

[MoonlitAngel]

Aw. Sad. But I like the metaphors held in this poem. Very good. It held a good flow, pain seemed to literally scream from it, and I can understand it too. I love this poem.:)

--Blood