Too Far
A Poem by
Kayleen
...
Crossed Line
Entwined
Your Body
And Mine
Soft Sighs
Shaking Thighs
Heavy Breath
Dirty Lie
Blame Drinks
Dont Think
Sinning Hearts
In Sync
© 2012 Kayleen
Author's Note
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Reviews
Nicely done in just a few short words!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
love the short lines, less words is sometimes better,
Blame drinks
don't thnk
sinning hearts
in sync
absolutely great!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
love the short lines, less words is sometimes better,
Blame drinks
don't thnk
sinning hearts
in sync
absolutely great!!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Interesting. Short, but graphic....great imagery
Posted 11 Years Ago
Interesting. Short, but graphic....great imagery
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
A lot said in very few words. Very nicely done.
Posted 12 Years Ago
A lot said in very few words. Very nicely done.
A lot of emotion in a few words... very powerful. The rhyming was also quite enjoyable!
To produce such clear, emotional pictures in so few words... amazing...
Posted 12 Years Ago
A lot of emotion in a few words... very powerful. The rhyming was also quite enjoyable!
To produce such clear, emotional pictures in so few words... amazing...
Fantastic, and nostalgic images conjured with so few words... very nice write!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Fantastic, and nostalgic images conjured with so few words... very nice write!
I've had nights like this. haha Not anymore though. Nice poem, with a lot of punch in a few words.
Posted 12 Years Ago
I've had nights like this. haha Not anymore though. Nice poem, with a lot of punch in a few words.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I like the style of this poem... Short, blunt, to the point, but with a rhyme scheme.
I tend to be a fan of just about anything that rhymes :P
Posted 12 Years Ago
I like the style of this poem... Short, blunt, to the point, but with a rhyme scheme.
I tend to be a fan of just about anything that rhymes :P
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
this was a good read, flowed well and the imagery was expressed well =) good read
Posted 12 Years Ago
this was a good read, flowed well and the imagery was expressed well =) good read
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I like the gentle flow of desire in the poem. Good poetry like this one can open the imagination with gentle words leading to a passionate ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 12 Years Ago
I like the gentle flow of desire in the poem. Good poetry like this one can open the imagination with gentle words leading to a passionate ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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Kayleen Anaheim, CA
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Kayleen.
22.
California.
I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions..
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