Tie me off

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Got a little baggie

hiding in my closet

got a little nagging

deep inside my head

got a little urge

to be what scares me

Dont know how much longer

I can keep it hidden away

tucked behind these skeletons

somewhere in the dark

im drowning in my secrets

This used to be an if

now I think its only when

Tie me off

let me feel

every bit of soul 

I steal

away 

from me

see I think that I can heal

if I can feel

these wounds rip through me

Got a little secret

hiding in my brain

got a little demon

deep inside my head

everything ive ever truly wanted

is enough to make me sick

Dont know how much longer

I can hide it all away

it slips out in each cut I make

and all the letters i never send

in little bits of conversation that you never catch

This used to be an if

but now I know its only when

Tie me off

let me feel

every bit of soul 

I steal

away 

from me

see I think that I can heal

if I could feel

your wounds rip through me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Indeed, it's song-like.

Reminds me of Iggy Pop's lyric: "America takes drugs in psychic defense."

"Tie me off/let me feel/every bit of soul/I steal/away/from me/see I think that I can heal/if I could feel/your wounds rip through me"

Those closing lines are darkly thrilling and induce heart-aching empathy.

[Jane Olivia Davis]

Got a little baggie
hiding in my closet
got a little nagging
deep inside my head
got a little urge
to be what scares me

this first stanza is epic darlin...i am one of those who can fully comprehend its magnitude.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The subtle differences in these two says it all for me;

‘This used to be an if
now I think its only when’

‘This used to be an if
but now I know its only when’

From only ’thinking’ you have issues to ‘knowing’ they are real, is an escape from self denial and a road to recovery! Anyone relating to your metaphorical composition as a reflection of their personal circumstances or a friend’s, needs to seek professional counselling!

Great write!

Phill(ozofee)

[Anata]

nice :) very nice ....

Especially:

Dont know how much longer
I can hide it all away
it slips out in each cut I make
and all the letters i never send
in little bits of conversation that you never catch

I know the feeling, and I know the pain ... and honestly, you can stuff it away but it never disappears ...

Very nice and heartfelt write!

[D.J. Lutz]

Powerful and well worded. Grieving, contemplative, pushing the decision on life and death. I read and re-read the piece four times, trying to understand the speaker's mindset. I was, and still am, rooting for a positive resolution and movement beyond the darkness and back into the light.

Thank you for sharing this with us.

[InkSlinger]

Bury the skeleton, come out and enjoy the sunshine.. I am pulling for ya.. Shed the extra pounds of pain, regret, and disdain, one should not have to carry the weight of the world all alone.. bury the skeleton, come out and enjoy the sunshine..

[Michael Howell]

I really connected with this. The flow of the poem really created the sense of desire and longing.

[Emily Quinn]

I like how you created a metaphore for a secret, how it can eat away at you, how it 'nags' you. Those big, dark secrets that consume your daily thoughts cansnowball. Loved the powm, great job

[Natalie C]

I have to agree with the previous reviewer, it does have some lyrical value to it which I really like. You used a lot of tight imagery in this piece which just seemed to give it that extra punch. Overall it was a real enjoyable read! Thanks for sharing.

[Ice QueenJen]

interesting poem, first I thought it was about hidden drugs behind the skeletons in the closet. But then as I read on it had a deeper meaning, of some hurt you are trying to hide away. Good writing and I hope you have healed your internal wounds!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Powerfully penned - seems like hidden drug use and self-abuse but could just be the meanderings of the mind wounded. Wonderfully secretive and powerful. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha