Virtual Touch

can it still be touching if nothing is tangible?

Shall I sit and write my troubles down for you?

You, the faceless names

You, the real virtuals

Sometimes, I try so hard to write down what's in my head

Like now, and now and then my emotions surpass my vocabulary

and this is what you get

An incoherent glimpse into some faint feeling I cant explain

Do you enjoy my misery or determination more?

Lets have a little vote

and decide how best to utilize this thing I seem to be

Manufacture me into an object of your entertainment

I reach for your approval

Do you find me miserable enough?

Pretty enough? 

to warrant your pity or your laugh?

Some connective common expression that passes quickly

over the faces I've never seen, staring blankly at this screen

in search of something human?

searching for what I provide

and struggle to find in you?

Author's Note

please if you read it, take four more second and leave a review so i know what you thought of it. thank you so much :)

Reviews

[Bare trees]

You were able to convey what a lot of people think but never say. If only our vocabulary were as easy to unleash as our hands at grasping what it wants. Your determination is admirable. Your looks are fine (dare I say cute) and your curiosity at wanting to know if your writing is reaching anyone is natural and common.

If only we could all know what the other person who is scanning our work is thinking. But as you know, not all who read our words will breathe a word about what they thought. So ultimately, Fran Marie is right, we must write to the point that we are happy with our own writing. As for the question you ask, yes, you do touch people with your writing. That's why I wrote this. Good job Kayleen.

[HappyTaylor]

This is REALLY good, it flows amazingly!!!!!!

[Ruth]

A search for internal recognition, for some proof that this isn't all there is! For some hop that can almost be grasped but then gone, awesome poem love
xx

[Nathan Durham]

I liked it a lot. It was really well written and powerful.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

To me, your write suggests a case of unrequited love. Love that is not openly shared or understood as such, even though reciprocation is usually deeply desired! Your adored may or may not be aware of the deep affections you have for them. This could also be a lonely individual seeking recognition from those around.
Great composition – makes you think about one’s attributes and what we look for in others.

[Marie Harrison]

I liked it. Thought it was humorous. Nice write.