Virtual Touch

can it still be touching if nothing is tangible?

Shall I sit and write my troubles down for you?

You, the faceless names

You, the real virtuals

Sometimes, I try so hard to write down what's in my head

Like now, and now and then my emotions surpass my vocabulary

and this is what you get

An incoherent glimpse into some faint feeling I cant explain

Do you enjoy my misery or determination more?

Lets have a little vote

and decide how best to utilize this thing I seem to be

Manufacture me into an object of your entertainment

I reach for your approval

Do you find me miserable enough?

Pretty enough? 

to warrant your pity or your laugh?

Some connective common expression that passes quickly

over the faces I've never seen, staring blankly at this screen

in search of something human?

searching for what I provide

and struggle to find in you?

Author's Note

please if you read it, take four more second and leave a review so i know what you thought of it. thank you so much :)

Reviews

[Bare trees]

You were able to convey what a lot of people think but never say. If only our vocabulary were as easy to unleash as our hands at grasping what it wants. Your determination is admirable. Your looks are fine (dare I say cute) and your curiosity at wanting to know if your writing is reaching anyone is natural and common.

If only we could all know what the other person who is scanning our work is thinking. But as you know, not all who read our words will breathe a word about what they thought. So ultimately, Fran Marie is right, we must write to the point that we are happy with our own writing. As for the question you ask, yes, you do touch people with your writing. That's why I wrote this. Good job Kayleen.

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this is a interesting view of our life in the vitual world, piting our hearts on our sleeves for strangers to pick away at..who cares what others think of you, most importantly what do you think of yourself! Good poem

[Bhavya Kaushik]

in search of something human?
searching for what I provide
and struggle to find in you?

I absolutely loved the way you ended this piece, it concluded the entire poem so perfectly. What I believe is that the flow of the poem can be better by writing the poem in a structural form, but nevertheless the emotional depth of the poem is overwhelming and has been felt by me as a reader.
Great work! :)

[Pax Analog]

This piece is what I'd call cunning. It reads like a bot that's been programmed to simulate self-reflexivity. It invites other "programmers" to contribute input. One even begins to wonder if the poem WAS scripted for an uncanny sim program.

Sophisto human simulation K-L! I don't have to tell you what bad boys program into their illusions. . .;-)

Teasing. . .You must admit it's an infinitely regressive notion. Fun write! Virtually, that is. . .

[Kailani]

This is an amazing write, Kayleen! :) I really enjoyed reading it, as it speaks the truth. You write lovely and touching work, and I really enjoy reading your writing.

I hope that you know many people love your work and that you are a great writer!

Keep up the great work!

Loved Reading it and how it shows how what people think and say are different

[Fran Marie]

I reach for your approval
Do you find me miserable enough?
Pretty enough? to warrant your pity or your laugh?

Written with a lot of emotion ~ and lower self esteem
happiness/confidence doesn't come from what others think of you
don't seek others approval but rather your own

Nice write....

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Amazing... I love this poem... I often wonder the same when I talk with someone on-line, especially if we are quiet close friends whom I've never met in real life...

[Steve]

Mmmm nice! This was a delightful read.

I love this perspective. Very original and attention getting.

[G. Anderson]

Very descriptive and thoughtful.
Gage likes.
~G.T.A.