Virtual Touch

can it still be touching if nothing is tangible?

Shall I sit and write my troubles down for you?

You, the faceless names

You, the real virtuals

Sometimes, I try so hard to write down what's in my head

Like now, and now and then my emotions surpass my vocabulary

and this is what you get

An incoherent glimpse into some faint feeling I cant explain

Do you enjoy my misery or determination more?

Lets have a little vote

and decide how best to utilize this thing I seem to be

Manufacture me into an object of your entertainment

I reach for your approval

Do you find me miserable enough?

Pretty enough? 

to warrant your pity or your laugh?

Some connective common expression that passes quickly

over the faces I've never seen, staring blankly at this screen

in search of something human?

searching for what I provide

and struggle to find in you?

Author's Note

please if you read it, take four more second and leave a review so i know what you thought of it. thank you so much :)

Reviews

[Bare trees]

You were able to convey what a lot of people think but never say. If only our vocabulary were as easy to unleash as our hands at grasping what it wants. Your determination is admirable. Your looks are fine (dare I say cute) and your curiosity at wanting to know if your writing is reaching anyone is natural and common.

If only we could all know what the other person who is scanning our work is thinking. But as you know, not all who read our words will breathe a word about what they thought. So ultimately, Fran Marie is right, we must write to the point that we are happy with our own writing. As for the question you ask, yes, you do touch people with your writing. That's why I wrote this. Good job Kayleen.

[Tony]

A timely write. I like your use of contemporary language and the spoken word quality added for a nice flowing narrative. Really enjoyed the phrase "the real virtuals"-- and the message... definately words to ponder over. Well done!

Makosica

[Skin]

A nicely executed piece.
Stands solid, nothing extra needed, nothing to remove,
Immovable.

[TadKent]

Wow. Great stuff. Can mean a number of things, can even apply to writerscafe! Your form is great. Touching and revealing,love it. ;)

[JB Murray]

This piece is far beyond your years, well written, very articulate, and unrelenting in the way it surpasses time and age. Enjoyed this one very much, and as always, looking forward to more...

[Lexi Nicole]

Wonderful. That's really the only way I can describe this. It's deep, intellectual even, and extremely honest. Great work, amazing piece :)

[Joshua Donahue]

this is very relate-able to many people and so honest. that makes this piece exceptionally great! love it!

[H. A. M.]

GORGEOUS! I'll say this was honest because be cause this is what I feel at times. Not always, but still at times looking for that validation. Good job!

[Ice QueenJen]

Wow this is a great poem about what its like to write something and have other people we haven't known for a long time read our words. And then wonder are we doing the same for their work, would they hate our review or love what we say about the writing they did.
Kudo's for being bold enough to write about this.

[Michael Howell]

I really connected to this one... And on an even deeper level than writing. I think everyone wants to be accepted in life, and they'll even change themselves to fit what other people want them to be. I really liked the frustration at others and at yourself you were able to put into this piece. I really enjoyed it, thank you for sharing that part of you!

[Brad]

the obligatory head full of thoughts but nothing to write? i've been there...too many times to count...the frustration is well documented here...