Virtual Touch

can it still be touching if nothing is tangible?

Shall I sit and write my troubles down for you?

You, the faceless names

You, the real virtuals

Sometimes, I try so hard to write down what's in my head

Like now, and now and then my emotions surpass my vocabulary

and this is what you get

An incoherent glimpse into some faint feeling I cant explain

Do you enjoy my misery or determination more?

Lets have a little vote

and decide how best to utilize this thing I seem to be

Manufacture me into an object of your entertainment

I reach for your approval

Do you find me miserable enough?

Pretty enough? 

to warrant your pity or your laugh?

Some connective common expression that passes quickly

over the faces I've never seen, staring blankly at this screen

in search of something human?

searching for what I provide

and struggle to find in you?

Author's Note

please if you read it, take four more second and leave a review so i know what you thought of it. thank you so much :)

Reviews

[Bare trees]

You were able to convey what a lot of people think but never say. If only our vocabulary were as easy to unleash as our hands at grasping what it wants. Your determination is admirable. Your looks are fine (dare I say cute) and your curiosity at wanting to know if your writing is reaching anyone is natural and common.

If only we could all know what the other person who is scanning our work is thinking. But as you know, not all who read our words will breathe a word about what they thought. So ultimately, Fran Marie is right, we must write to the point that we are happy with our own writing. As for the question you ask, yes, you do touch people with your writing. That's why I wrote this. Good job Kayleen.

[Tara]

I could absolutely relate to this poem. I have the passion and depth in my soul as the poem does, but like the poem says its hard to get it down on paper and out of your head. Great work.

[Rose Black]

I loved it... Man that was amazing... I feel that somehow if you write to the facless names at least someone will see it take interest ... if you keep everithing bottled up won't do you any good and because they are faceless they are a lot easyed to deal with than flesh and bone people these you can block out, the non virtual people you can't they allways find a way in... Again amazing poem.

Love R

[Tai Ryens]

I've attributed most of the feelings you convey through this poem to my own feelings when I attempt to write through the cloud of writer's block looming over me. In an odd manner, this piece read rather strained to me, and I feel that adds more onto the overall concept of this poem by directly tapping into the feelings you write about, thus strengthening the piece into something that can be, contrarily, read more easily and understood by the reader. Well done indeed, Kayleen.

[Wynter Ignatius]

It's odd that many of my virtual friends are closer to me than many of my own family of late. My best friend I've not met face to face yet (for various reasons) yet our hearts and souls are old, old friends; kindred in so many ways it still shocks us both how easily we click without judgments, without pretense, without all the bullshit and lies - unabashed honesty without regard to misunderstanding or the such as not much if any exists between us.

As always kudos and keep it up.

[Eddie Phillips]

Tangible feelings in a intangible world. We are a computer based network of feelings and emotions. I think you hit this pretty hard and provide a good take on it. It is painful to think about but truthful in its conception. I truly liked it.

[MickeyGani]

I love it, honestly.......

[Rick Stassi]

It is tangible and I do not enjoy your misery: I am empatheic as one who must try and articulate deep thoughts to the virtual world. I assure you it is all tangilble as understanding and caring does not need a physical presence.
God bless you.
Rick

[n14n74]

This one shows how exactly i feel sometimes.nice

[Quinn]

Brilliantly written, you can really feel the emotion throughout.

[Mirra]

I enjoyed reading this one and can really relate to it. I also have these feeling, sometimes there are things which I can't put into words but the feeling is so strong. Well-expressed!