Wot you doin?

written for the Accents contest. English (cockney and proper)

eh boy, wot you doin?

don start 'at boy, 'eres trouble brewin'

I sees your face, da way youre movin

oi boy! wot you doing?

please sir, let me pass.

I want no trouble, I'm late for class.

I haven't time for such delays.

Im late for class, I mustn't stay.

eh boy, wot you thinkin?

jus wan' a chat. you keen on drinkin?

I sees your face, da way its sinkin

wan' a know wot I been thinkin?

please sir, permit me by.

I want no drink, brandy nor rye.

I want no trouble, I'm late for class.

please sir, please sir, let me pass.

eh boy, you silly thing,

you really think i'ould let you leave?

see i were thinkin youd best do's i please.

you like knives boy? how 'bout these?

please sir, please sir! harm me not!

take my tuppence! take the lot!

let me pass, please let me live!

I have so much more to give!

eh boy, now, thats no fun!

wot sense isit leavin a job half done?

don' fret me lad, soon you'll see,

ol' Jackie Ripper hain't got not'in on me.

Author's Note

if you took the time to read it, please take the extra 4 seconds to leave a review. thanks :)

Reviews

[Kyle]

I liked how it was from two peoples perspectives. One guy who seemed to be reasonable, just wanting to go to class. And another guy who wanted to do what he could to lead him down the wrong path. I really enjoyed this and liked how you did the accents. Must have been really tough at first. Keep up the great work!

[Tony]

You deliver a double impact with the two contrasting characters and their different traits. The is captivating with it's dark overtones which made for a fast paced reading-- and the final stanza is witty and works well with the character. "wot sense is it leavin a job half done?" taking the money and letting him pass would be half the job and no fun.

[luciddreamer]

really good write...I am becomming a fan of yours :)
Peace
Robin

[Skin]

Excellent
Nuff said Girl

[Stella]

very good!

[Kyle Insane]

I'll take more than four seconds, that was something I've been looking for...ages, i cant describe anymore how surreal life feels - the whole reason i joined this site was to showcase my work and see if anyone else felt some resonating, but for me to click on you randomly, and pick that, randomly... i'm starting to believe there's less chance and more serendipity than i would've first accorded.