Save Me

lyrics.

Father

I am calling

Father

I am Falling

Messiah

Can you save me from this hell

Im losing myself

Father

I am crawling

Father

 I am falling

Hosanna 

In the highest

Can you save me from myself

Release me from this cell

Help me stand back on my own two feet again

Father

I jumped I fear I am drowning

Father

In my head alarms are sounding

Emmanuel 

Please save me from myself

Messiah 

I am pleading

Deliverer

I am bleeding

and i see the knife has been 

In my own hands

Father take the pain away

Just take it all away

God save me

God save me

God save me 

Save me from my self

God save me

God save me 

Release me from myself

Release me from myself

Author's Note

if you took the time to read it please review it. thanks ( the flow might seem a little funky when you read it, but with the melody it works fine)

Reviews

[Dennis Shanaberg]

and i see the knife has been
In my own hands
These lines were kind of awkward. It kind of threw off the pace of the poem. The sentiment in them was awesome though. The fact that the pain we feel is usually self inflicted, not the fault of God as most people feel the need to blame him.
Overall, though the poem was fantastic. Other than the two aforementioned lines, it flowed beautifully. I also found it awesome how many names you found to describe Him. You may even want to trying in a few more, to break it up even more.
Anyways, a great piece, that could just maybe use a little more working up.
Keep it up.

[kruser23]

So, it's a song?

I really liked it, and growing up in a very religious family and not always living up to certain standards i can definitely relate. Nice work.

[Anata]

Very nice!

[JB Murray]

Though I am not of the religious mind so to speak, I have a tendency to lean away from things like this, the idea that there is a God somewhere and that he will one day save us etc... Ironically that was how I felt readin this until I got to the lines regarding the knife, where I think this may just shed some light that though before anyone can be saved, one has to look within and take responsibility for themselves... salvation for everyone begins inside one's soul... so I think that this is a nice combination of both religion and spirituality, which sometime swalk two very different lines... nicely done Kayleen!

[Jeff Miller]

The words match up well. Not exactly my taste...but it was a job well done. Keep it up :)

[Michael X]

this seems identical to another song. the style is brilliant, but originality is void. and i kinda lost interest. but you have an amazing way with word play and for thsat a 100/100

[Adrian K. Smith]

I have to disagree with the comment about the knife being awkward, and not simply because I tend to be disagreeable at random intervals. I saw it as being symbolic of ourselves as the device that brings about much of our suffering. It is a good device, when one thinks about it - since much of what we do to ourselves tends toward cutting in some fashion. We cut away the good - we pick at the bad. The tip of the blade becomes a focus, and we stab with that focus at ourselves (some, whenever they get the chance). It has that overall feel of the combination of the First and Second Steps of most of those Twelve Step Programs (take away the substance of choice, and you are left with a spiritual disease). There is the admission of the problem, the realization of needing help, and asking a Higher Power for assistance. Some might say that it is the basis of prayer, yet this does not come off that simple - it has that greater depth, and you can hear the frustrating agony that flows through the melody.

[Ruth]

Powerful piece friend! Great poem and thought provoking, internal battle! Poppy

[Taylor H.]

this was a powerful poem. The flow was good and the word choice was interesting. I enjoyed this poem. Great job!