Steppin out

girls on the street

Steppin out
Baby's tricked out
Turning tricks out
On the boulevard
In a black dress
Shes a hot mess

Sadist masochist
In the back of your car
She was a pretty thing
She had a big dream
Kept her nose clean
But now shes
Steppin out
Baby's strung out
Sellin fun out
On the boulevard

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

You've chosen your rhymes well, and the quick pace of the poem is one that, though I am unused to the style, tells the story of your character quite nicely. Well done. It's truly a woe that situations like these are apparent in some places of the world.

[I Am Svetlana]

I feel every girl has their own reason for being on the streets. It's sad, but true. It's a tough life, but hey, some actually enjoy the hustle & what they do. You tell a powerful truth with this write & you penned out each line so well.

[JB Murray]

As a songwriter... I think this piece has great lyrical value. It's hard-hitting, and blunt. I can almost hear the scratching buzz of the guitar behind it!

[C. Rose]

I like that there was some rhyming, but you didn't force it into a scheme.
I like the repetition of on the boulevard and steppin out.
I'm worried for her.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of words create a vision of beauty and sadness in the same vision. The good description allowed the reader to know the place and the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[RAOrourke]

I loved the story behind your words and the way your flow moved the reader along through this sad poem. Great job!!

[Emily]

Love this one!
My favorite of yours!
Keep it up!

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Great rhyme. It has great potential, and I'm sure that with music added, would be even better! hope you win that Rock Songs contest.

[DamienHino]

cool...hip hop beat

[Ben]

Nice flow. Good job!