The Knife

This poem I created in like 10 seconds. Hope u like it :) This is also my first creation on this website so I'm still trying to figure the website out.

The Knife

There he goes

Smiling like nothings gone wrong

Laughing like it's all a joke

Like he didn't hurt me.

His face, his lips, his heartbeat,

It stabs me like a knife

A knife that goes in deeper with every touch of his skin.

I try to pull out the knife, but I can't

He holds it down

Forces me to remember the pain

The pain that made me numb

Numb to this world

Numb to happiness.

So I use the knife

To end my sorrowful life

For the pain from the knife

Is better than the pain from him.

So I end my life

End it with the knife.

Author's Note

So just tell me what you think of it. If there are any grammar problems or anything that you thought could've been better, or if you just liked it.

Reviews

[WildRose]

Ten seconds, wish I could do something like that in ten seconds.

I reminds me of something I wrote last year but have yet to post.

Keep writing!

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[Bud]

I like it. I don't criticize on formats or grammatical errors or things of that nature. I'm a free-style writer. So...I like the write. I thought it conveyed the message clearly. We all can relate to the hurts and pains of love and the sort. Keep up the great work! Follow your heart! : )

[crashandburnplz]

I say maybe, put in some more punctuation, but that's about it.

I liked it; I can relate, far too much. D:

Great job. :]