Anguish

Deep pain of loneliness without someone special

Clouds cover the whole sky, shows dark night
Birds sit in their nest, can't try to flight
Anywhere moon not seen, put off its light

On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

Her picture in my hands, her face bring out me
On bed of thorns I live, without her feel wee
I stare her picture, and mumble where thee?

I wallow in the mire, life full with ruin jerk
I don't swallow pain of lonely, don't do any work
I mis wailing without her, time seems like mirk

when she'as on the brink of grave, i never forget that time
Stare into my eyes with keen interest, she waive body at all times

Author's Note

If any mistake related to Grammar then please help to correct it.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was really beautiful, i could tell it was written straight from your heart.
It was sad and very romantic.
Very emotional and heartfelt this piece.
this was my favorite part
On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

The rhyming was also amazing :)
I really enjoyed reading this :) Keep writing i like the way you write :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Good Work Buddy :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I hope you don't mind me pointing out that there are some grammatical errors, you miss out words sometimes in your sentence construction ( via interpreting from your language no doubt), other wise you content is really interesting, very well done

[Shivam Murari]

Very nice imagery. Full of grammatical mistakes, all get ignored in front of this wonderful piece :) Thanks for sharing :)

[Gaurav Walia]

Although thr are some grammatical errors nd some syntax infractions but ths is still a
Strong one..you conveyed the pain quite beautifully...keep it up.. :D

[Shonali]

vry gud rhyming!!!!

[Pax]

intriguing imagery ~ painful suffering of once was.
Nicely written!

[olla]

the hardest thing sometimes is to try to put into words those raw gut wrenching emotions that we have all experienced.. it is why we turn to our poets to do it for us.. the struggle to find your words in a foriegn tongue created that wrech to the gut that gives your poem such imense impact.. my heart wants to weep for the writer..

[Rogue]

A very sad and emotional reflection on loneliness and a broken heart.

As a few others mentioned, there are grammatical errors. But the depth of feeling in the overall piece keeps them from detracting from it.

Very good work. :)

[Jessica Gillitzer]

So interesting, I get the connection in this to longing for another person, there's a little break down in you english or grammar such as typos. I think you have the heart of a true poet and just need to practice your usage or ask questions. i think you show here though that you are a natural.
< 3 Jessie

[Angi]

I like the feel of this work even though your grasp of English is slightly off. Touching.