Time

"What can I say.."

It is between you and me
Love begets love
She added insult to my injury
A broken HEART is of no use


Do not beat about the bush
Why are you after me
She was talking loudly
She gave me a curt reply


Hope sustains life
My hopes were dashed to the ground


I am weeping bitterly
I feel home sick
I have seen many ups and downs in life
Time hangs heavy on me


I am at a loss to know what to do
I would rather die than forget
Death keeps no calendar
Death defies all treatment


Time has wings
Time is a great healer

Author's Note

If any mistake related to grammar then please help to correct it. THANKS!

Reviews

[Inder24]

Wonderful poetry ! :)

[Robin]

Great write. I love the beginning and how love was put on the line and given a curt reply. Keep up the good work.

[kerikil]

I like this one! When I pronounce every word out loud, I can hear the poem's melodious rhythm. Thank you for the amazing poem!

[Nicky Sarti]

I really liked this, very moving and powerful.

[kublakhan27]

I think time is the only healer when you stop and think about it...great work :)

[Timeless-Chan]

I like the line "Time has wings" idk why I just think it's very pretty! Good job with this! Keep up the good work and continue writing!

~Dreamer!

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST RESPONSE

1. Grammar is not always a requirement for poetry. Therefore, I will not pinpoint grammar errors:D

INTRODUCTION

The first stanza really speaks to my love of love. I admire poetry that is not afraid to be proud of who they are.

BODY

The rest of the poem has a select few slang phrases. However, slang is not considered "bad," and it is your choice if you would like to use them :D

1. "broken heart"

2. "do not beat around the bush"

These two are the only problems I had with the poem because I try to avoid cliches in a serious poem. Cliches are better suited in satires or humorous poems.

Here is the vocabulary that I loved:

1. curt
2. hope
3. death
4. time
5. heal

The above vocabulary words are universal except for "curt." I just never heard of this word before. Therefore, I enjoyed how it was placed in the poem.

Hope is related to faith. Hope is something a realist needs more of.

Death is apart of the balance of life. It is the yin yang to the cycle of life. I would suggest watching Disney's, "The Lion King" if you have not yet. Frankly, American culture can be egotists, and rather distasteful. However, some of American media contains an excellent message.

Time is a mathematical based form that us humans like to tamper with. However, in this particular poem, "time" is used as a loose term. For instance, distance from a lover will be able to mend the open wound, so to speak.

Healing is a physical and mental factor of humanity. We are sensitive creatures. Therefore, we are hurt easily. It does not matter how much we claim to be apathetic.

CONCLUSION

I felt that this poem was sincere, straightforward, and represented the writer accurately. I loved the message!

SUGGESTIONS

1. Thesaurus: I would recommend using a thesaurus that has your language and the English language. This will allow you to choose more words. The English language is difficult because it is a plethora of words from various cultures. If anything, Americans are copy cats! :P

Thank you for the read!

[Mark]

Straight forward writing, your descriptions are crisp and to the point. Is English a second language to you? I can't tell from the write; it's very well done.

[Rick Puetter]

An interesting write. Yes, time is a great healer. Thank goodness for that since there is so much to heal in life.

Very best regards,

Rick

[Marie]

Time heals everything that is wounded in this poem.