The Sickness

Inspired by a family member's death

 

The people with the sickness

Walk around. Mind-less.

 

I try to convince the healthy to leave,

But they are too stubborn to believe.

 

I watch as it kills people like an infection,

Destroying town, section by section.

 

I tried to get somebody,

But they we’re busy counting money.

 

I try to get injected,

So I don’t get infected.

 

But no shot would do,

You’ll need your mind to make it through.

 

The black smoke,

Works its way to the young folk.

 

The only protection,

Is isolation.

Reviews

[poetic soul]

i agree -

The only protection,
Is isolation.

nice poem

Regards,
Poetic Soul

[Amanda Crandall]

Ok just step away from the resident evil... go on... it's all right.

well written, adequately spaced, and your punstuation places proper emphasis in the proper places.

[Maddie]

I like this alot reminds me of 28 days later with all the disease and death, or like the book series left behind because they don't repent when they should...

Lovelyy.

[Charles]

awesome form and metaphors

[Nightwish Ruin]

INTERESTING KINDA SOUNDS LIKE DAWN OF THE DEAD. I LIKE THE CONCEPT. THE DISEASE SPREADING AND NO ONE EVEN CARING OR BELIEVING. GOOD JOB...NIGHTWISH

[Bri]

How true, how true. An excellent poem, and I loved the rhyme scheme and spacing. See, I review things. Now you go review mine!

[MJ (:]

I loved it!
It's got really good rhyme
and rhythm
And I give it
2
thumbs
Up.

[Tripp]

Awww! I like it! ^^ I think it's pretty good! ^^

[Steppenfreak]

Nice poem; excellent rhyming and rhythm, and a very good way of getting the message through to readers.
Great work.

[Greggae]

I believe I believe.
I'm not usually a fan of verse, but I really like what you did here and I agree with the message.
Good write