Imprints

Imprints

A Poem by Puck

The imprint you left on the moss last summer

is turning green with the rain

your mark fading

I forget your touch that sent electric shivers along my skin

I forget your sigh that warmed me from groin to lips

I forget your scent that lingered in the room like freshly turned soil

I have only pieces of the leaves and twigs 

that was once your oak tree

I have only a feeling you left

buried in my heart like a seed

I forget when you planted it, or if it was me

It will not grow for some time

Patience is key

May I permit myself to lament what can never be?

When that mark has faded from the moss

It will remain in my heart

Imprinted above the buried seed

© 2015 Puck


Author's Note

Puck
How is the ending? Does it sound finished or should I add more?

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A very good ending.
"When that mark has faded from the moss
It will remain in my heart
Imprinted above the buried seed"
You left the reader in final place and deep thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love it just the way it is. sometimes it's better to leave us wanting more.


Posted 9 Years Ago


I think it ended perfectly. "imprinted above the buried seed". It's a great summing up, but in a gentle way. I loved the natural metaphor. Very nice!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 10, 2015
Last Updated on October 12, 2015
Tags: love, mourning, unrequited, hope, loss, scars

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Puck
Puck

Pacific Northwest, Canada



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