Fourth Dimension

I walk the crooked, soiled streets of the city.

On my way to convene with the maker.

Longing for answers.

 I cannot help feeling alone despite being surrounded by humanity.

Sidestepping cardboard cliches, plastic pretense and spurious souls.

I pass by people on the sidewalk in a gauntleted sandwich.

Drowning in an anal retentive aphrodisiac.

I have no reflection in the wry puddles of yesterday's acid rain.

In a cruel game of "Ring Around The Rosie".

Everyone zigs whilst I zag.

I am a prisoner of emotion and wear my heart upon my sleeve.

Where all can see.

I do not fit in.

I cling obstinately to an internal song that never ends.

It is mine and no one can hear it, let alone comprehend it.

My perception goes far around, through and below the surface.

Pardon me as I scurry by and move deeply into a ...

... fourth dimension ...

Reviews

[lessa (kenzie)]

In a cruel game of "Ring Around The Rosie".
Everyone zigs whilst I zag.
I am a prisoner of emotion and wear my heart upon my sleeve.
Where all can see.
I do not fit in.

I LOVE this part, this is a really well written wonderful piece,
awesome song to boot!

[Pete]

thank you. you rock! :)

[barleygirl]

Being a fool for wilderness living, I have little experience in the beat of the city as you've drummed it here, but I suspect you've got it perfectly spot-on. I enjoy the way your tone sounds a bit sarcastic, as if you're doing a spoof on all our pathetic platitudes & clichés, stating each one with a bizarre twist, almost incomprehensible, but also perfectly logical in a distorted way. Taken altogether, it's like the madness makes us crazy, so then we can understand it better (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Pete]

OMG. your intuition and ability to read between lines is uncanny, almost scary. you really get my writings! i respectfully & humbly bow to a literary master (both your reviews & writes). amazing review. thank you. :)

[barleygirl]

Now I'm the one humbled! *sigh!* You're too kind!

[Tracey~]

I always say your not the odd man out...you're the right one in.. silly but I feel many are Empathic to the point where we feel to much around us.. we want different but can't make it happen. I'm babbling lol... so I'll say great write..xo

[Pete]

thanks Tracey. honest thoughts/feelings are not babbling. i appreciate your stopping by. :)

[Susan 🦋]

Story of my life.Those that feel too strongly, love unconditionally, judge nothing..often feel excluded from this world that can't understand. Where did you pull this one from? wow

[Pete]

thank you susan. yeah, not an easy road. i write what is on the inside longing to find its way out ...

[Susan 🦋]

Trust me...I know.

[emmajoy]

'I pass by people on the sidewalk in a gauntleted sandwich.
Drowning in an anal retentive aphrodisiac.
I have no reflection in the wry puddles of yesterday's acid rain.'

Fine, fine writing, language pure, intelligent, but more than anything, emotionally contained... which in my book - makes it honest.

I wonder if writers write so as to some time focus on the people they want to meet or - want to be, Alternatively, tangle and battle with the types the writers want deep, deep inside to dispose of but in real life cannot!!!

[Pete]

thank you em. glad to see you back in the cafe. i find that there is a curious diversity in people with much to like & dislike. perhaps we use others as a comparative measuring stick with which to evaluate ourselves or as a gauge or compass with which to direct ourselves. after all, the almighty does portend to dwell in us ...

[emmajoy]

Whoever we are is a secret to be shared or not; whoever we become is a miracle to be believed. Perhaps...

[Pete]

i like that and light can sneak in through a crack or pour in through an opening - depending on how much we open up and let it in or out. perhaps 'tis better to be hated for who we are than loved for who we're not ...

[emmajoy]

TRUE, absolutely.

[Tony Jordan]

When one feels disconnected it's quite natural to want to 'fit in' somewhere else, I feel, Pete.
Its the wellspring for those 'imaginary friends' we meet as kids. Perhaps those resistant to being coerced into being a 'norm' are really just super-aware of other possibilities

[Pete]

thanks T. have i ever told you that i hate it when you're right? Lol

[Tony Jordan]

Whoa - I'm right?
(Takes a screen shot) - lol
Welcome Pete.