B***h 'Whine'

Her devious, diabolical drink danced with deception.

Sanctimonious soda sizzled with seductive seltzer.

Paralyzing posion ivy and a polarizing punch.

Liberal, loquacious liquor of lignification.

A creative concoction of cantankerous, callus condemnation.

Colloquial, cajoling confection of constant constipation.

Brazen beverage of bedazzling, befuddling boldness.

Nauseating, narcissistic, nefarious nectar.

An electrifying, egregious elixir.

Her mammoth, melancholy, mountainous melons manufactured malice.

Caustic curves calculated and coaxed.

Smooth skin like a lotioned lotus.

Luscious, lacivious, lamentable lips.

Her eyes blinked like tenacious traffic lights.

Hair hung like hedonistic, harrowing curtains.

Lanky, laminated legs read like a harlot laureate.

The scent of lackadaisical lavender wafting.

I wish I'd never pursed my lips and imbibed the ...

... b***h 'whine' ...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'Her eyes blinked like tenacious traffic lights.
Hair hung like hedonistic, harrowing curtains.
Lanky, laminated legs read like a harlot laureate.'

I gather you were pedantically potty about the wafting whine. What a clever concoction to set before the public. Definitely stirred and surely shaken by the intensity. Clever, clever stuff.. great wordage, very tongue in cheek but deliciously decadent in its own way!.

[Pete]

Lol. i like to push the limits sometimes - this one certainly one of those times. you are correct in your assessment. i hope not too clever though. tried to capture the essence of this femme fatale as powerfully as i could.

[emmajoy]

As I a wine drinker..! Enjoyed it as a cleverly contrived poem filled to the brim with clever alliteration.. not over the top, merely well placed and worthy of AA meetings probably.

[emmajoy]

Just had a thought, hope my final comment isn't considered 'flip' or politically incorrect.. was trying to be funny.. oops.

[Pete]

no worries. 'tis all taken in proper context. did make me chuckle. no offense whatsoever.

[AprilRN1210]

can't help but giggle when reading this. deadly delicious devil she is sounds like. my love for alliteration was definitely in heaven with this write. nicely done.

[Pete]

thank you AprilRN1210. glad it made you chuckle. the alliteration is something that seems to come out naturally when i write to capture emotion/feeling. meant no disrespect to women at all. lot of exaggeration in capturing the essence of someone i know. i like to push the limits oftentimes with my writes. all for effect, which it seems to have achieved.

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome. Limits are meant to be tested :)

[andrew mitchell]

gee whiz pete, this was the she devil using cosby's secret medicine elixir. love the imagery, top notch.

[Pete]

thanks for stopping by Andrew. got a little carried away perhaps. like to push the limits too.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Sum Beach! ... Sounds like a female I met long ago ... Hope to never meet again ... Splendid alliteration, as I am a fan of alliteration and have been known to indulge in intense alliteration within the passages of a few of my poems ... This piece of your heart penned to page--my goodness what goes on in that inventive mind of yours--is extremely well constructed, and your word selection surpasses perfection ... I really enjoyed this read, Pete ...

[Pete]

thank you Marv. yeah, sometimes that mind really gets spinning ...