I'll Show You Mine if You Show Me Yours

My life is but a fleeting breath from god.

A mere touch from the hem of his robe.

The intoxicating, abounding aroma of an orchard on a crisp, autumn day.

Surrounding and bathing me in spiritual ecstasy.

Caretaker, rainmaker and music maker of my soul.

Maintenance man of the moon and universe.

He fills my ocean like a blissful, benificent bathtub.

Takes me for walks on cathartic carpets of crimson.

Sailing sanctity in the stratosphere.

I dance in miraculous melodies of his majesty.

A jaunty, jovial jig to heartsome, harmonic harps.

He defibrilates my heart with jolts of joy like a daedal doctor.

He is the track to my train.

The gold in my mining vein.

The sledge to my hammer.

The hand when I fall.

My reason, my all.

He is the king in my chess game.

Uncheckmateable. 

He is ...

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Pete,
I totally get it and identify with every word! God, God and God! We live in the vibrancy of His spirit's breath for all we envision is the result of His creativity. So much great stuff in this poem. I just smiled my way through it...................Kathy

[Pete]

thanks Kathy. awesome review. always glad when you stop by for a read. birds of a feather ... :)

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yea that's right..........birds of a feather and why not. We can exalt in the mysteries for it is our joy to do so................

[Hebe]

It's my turn to bow down... This is breathtaking, with every word you transcended this celestial vision that captured faith, love and pureness of heart... this is uncheckmateable! Just stunning Pete!

[Pete]

thank you so much Hebe for kind review. as always, appreciate your reading and comments. uplifting and beautiful review!

[Diamond]

Like Gullia said, there are so many beautiful lines in this poem. The Uncheckmatable...benevolent though. I also love the picture. A nice piece of work Pete.

[Pete]

thanks Queen. your thoughts are always welcomed! :)

[Diamond]

My pleasure Pete, I always want to give a longer reviews. But I have a son of an age that keeps me on toes..lol. I really loved this writing.

[Pete]

i understand. sometimes i don't know what to say either. the little ones always come first though. I know what that is like. best regards :)

[Giulia King]

"He fills my ocean like a blissful, benificent bathtub." Love it! There are so many beautiful lines in this poem!

[Pete]

thank you Gullia for such a great review. appreciated. you rock!

[grey.eyes]

love this!! im not much a religious person, but i could really appreciate your writing and your expressed love and gratitude very well done :)

[Pete]

thanks grey.eyes i appreciate your kind comments and friendship. i will be 'round for a read very soon. :)

[Tony Jordan]

You certainly showed us that you love your saviour and as an aside that you are the king of alliteration on the WC - as far as I can see Pete.
Love your word choice.
Well done my friend.
:)

[Pete]

thank you dear friend. your words are ever encouraging and appreciated. :)