Faith

Wavering faith, despair, questioning.

Is my life a blessing or is it a curse?

Perhaps I belong in the back of a hearse.

Nature is truth and  man is a lie.

I tried to reach up and touch the sky.

I cried my tears 'til there were no more.

I stared at the ocean and walked by it's shore.

I tried my best but it wasn't enough.

In the end, life's the one of who was tough.

I pleaded with God but he turned a deaf ear.

The demons took over and crushed me with fear.

The greatest things in life cannot be taken from you.

Your beliefs and your word must always stand true.

My faith was strong like steel; in God I did trust.

But the hurt was too much and tears turned it to rust.

I can't walk on water and I can't conquer sin.

His boat's always there; I just need to climb back in . . .

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your rhyme schemes are so flawless its so awesome haha.
I loved this poem, so much meaning, its so deep and its a soul searching piece.
It is hard with what happens in life sometimes to still have such faith and belief in god that is true.
Although even when you do start to loose faith its true god is always there for you, and you can come back to him whenever you want.

[Pete]

Awesome review - couldn't possibly have said it any better cimmy. thank you so much. It makes me smile when folks "get" my work. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yeah I'm not even that religious to be honest. I usually get most pieces. May help that I'm such an emotional soul haha. I'm very intune with my emotions as well as others. Guess my really emotional side helps me in my writing, and is one of the reasons why I am a writer :)

[Pete]

For sure - we have to be in touch with our emotions and tap into them to write. The best writing comes from the gut, not the head.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

That is very true. Although some people are not very intune with there emotions as others. I can imagine it would be harder for them to write :)

[kyam]

So, So beautiful and boy can I relate...So wonderfully written with great feeling..Bravo!!....Kyam

[Pete]

Thank you. I know that you, of all people "get it" and feel it. Thanks for taking the time. Blessings to you.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Strong words. Well said. So many people can relate to the thoughts and the feelings. Great write!

[Pete]

Thanks for such a thoughtful review. Much appreciated.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're very welcome.

[Reba]

So true. This reminds me of my walk with God. I love how you ended this. It was very effective.

[Pete]

Thank you so much. I appreciate you taking the time to review and I encourage you in your walk with God. Best regards.

[Reba]

Thank you!

[guy drori]

"Nature is truth and man is a lie?" This line in the first stanza definitely gave me something to think about. It is a question, I believe, that cannot be answered in a black and white manner.
The second stanza gave me a feeling of defeat . . . as if the obstacles of life are too great to surmount.

I'm having trouble with the last two lines though. The speaker says he cannot walk on water and he cannot conquer sin - meaning he is not strong enough to fight the darker forces of life, yet at the end when he says that God's boat is always there, then all he needs to do is climb back in. So . . . he CAN overcome his sins. Or is "climbing back in" not a reference to overcoming sins? That is simply how I understood it.

Had a nice read . . . and the picture added.

[Pete]

You are spot on. Last two lines you are being too literal though. Just a metaphor that I need him period (not just for sins) but it came across as you point out. I also mention walking on water (my metaphor for needing him for everything). Needing him for both - can't make it without him. You are very astute. Thanks.

[Pete]

I start out posing a question as you say, "Nature is truth and man is a lie.
I tried to reach up and touch the sky." Then the dark doubt and finally an affirmation. The whole thing taken together is a metaphor for faith - flip-flopping, doubting, etc.

[guy drori]

Well I really enjoyed reading Pete . . . very nice write

[Jo R.]

Yea....to climb back in. I think we forget that just because the faith is there that we can always grasp it, always hang on, "stay in the boat". In truth, the storms of life toss us about like corks and we need to remember to keep breathing while we try to make our way back to that boat. Just because I know Him doesn't mean I know how to stay connected 24/7. Thanks Pete for these powerful images!

PS I once hailed from Boston myself.

[Pete]

Thank you Jo (BeanTown girl). Remember what I wrote, "The greatest things in life cannot be taken from you."

[Jo R.]

No they cannot and that is a great blessing!

[Paul Bell]

Tough one, faith. When you need it, it aint there.
When you don't. Maybe it is.
I suppose that's what they call true faith.

[Pete]

I guess the thing is to get to the point where when you need it, it is there. Then there are no doubts, we just walk with it no matter what. At least that's my goal. Thanks for the read.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Pete,
Feeling that God is deaf to our tears, that our life is a curse and not easy. Amazing because in all of the complexities our stability is or lack of does not really define who we are. Jesus came to give His perfection for our lack. Then we are truly defined! Blessings as you continue to share wonderful insights with the rest of us...................Kathy

[Pete]

Thank you Kathy. My problem has always been that I let circumstances define who I am. Now I "Let go & let God". I had to learn the hard way. Many blessings to you.

[Dara]

Words to live by. Your poem is a reminder for us to 'let go and let God". Great write my friend.

[Pete]

Thanks so much the read. Best regards.

[Hanah Gotski]

A poem that keeps you wondering. The effect of the poem lasts even after it is over. The hope presented is last line is beyond praise!

[Blysful]

This was so pretty!! And inspiring, too. The metaphors are beautiful, and I love both the rhythm and upbeat imagery in the last two lines. I look forward to more!