Faith

Wavering faith, despair, questioning.

Is my life a blessing or is it a curse?

Perhaps I belong in the back of a hearse.

Nature is truth and  man is a lie.

I tried to reach up and touch the sky.

I cried my tears 'til there were no more.

I stared at the ocean and walked by it's shore.

I tried my best but it wasn't enough.

In the end, life's the one of who was tough.

I pleaded with God but he turned a deaf ear.

The demons took over and crushed me with fear.

The greatest things in life cannot be taken from you.

Your beliefs and your word must always stand true.

My faith was strong like steel; in God I did trust.

But the hurt was too much and tears turned it to rust.

I can't walk on water and I can't conquer sin.

His boat's always there; I just need to climb back in . . .

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your rhyme schemes are so flawless its so awesome haha.
I loved this poem, so much meaning, its so deep and its a soul searching piece.
It is hard with what happens in life sometimes to still have such faith and belief in god that is true.
Although even when you do start to loose faith its true god is always there for you, and you can come back to him whenever you want.

[Pete]

Awesome review - couldn't possibly have said it any better cimmy. thank you so much. It makes me smile when folks "get" my work. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yeah I'm not even that religious to be honest. I usually get most pieces. May help that I'm such an emotional soul haha. I'm very intune with my emotions as well as others. Guess my really emotional side helps me in my writing, and is one of the reasons why I am a writer :)

[Pete]

For sure - we have to be in touch with our emotions and tap into them to write. The best writing comes from the gut, not the head.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

That is very true. Although some people are not very intune with there emotions as others. I can imagine it would be harder for them to write :)

[D Connolly]

The poem is sad, but it ends with a solution, so that's hopeful. It's always sad to me to see people who struggle with their personal faith. It's like they're lost in an ocean. The question "is life a blessing or a curse" could be looked at one of 2 ways. Either we cry because the rose bush has thorns, or rejoice because the thorn bush has roses. It's all in how you look at it I guess. *cyber-hug*

[Pete]

Thanks Dani. I appreciate that. It has been a difficult time. I've been struggling to see the roses - always seems to come up thorns. I've been feeling down about my friend. Appreciate the read and encouraging words.

[D Connolly]

Every grey cloud has a silver lining Pete. Keep your head up and I'm here for you :)

[Silver Higdon]

Awesome work can relate with my own struggles with faith but we can all overcome poo ur trials and tribulations..

[Pete]

Easier said than done but true nevertheless. Thanks for the read Silver.

[Davina]

Some very astute observations of pain and hopelessness drawn on in this piece I think, perhaps with a note of optimism right at the end? Raw, honest and engaging.

[Pete]

Yes. I am still in "the boat" despite being tossed out many times. It is not an easy walk (or swim). Thank you for reviewing.

[Jamieya B-Johnson]

A taste of what we go through as individuals who struggle in the faith walk. A journey that is a struggle and a life with phases of uncertainty. The power to get back in....inspirational, great work

[Pete]

Thank you Jamieya. You're very kind. I appreciate the review. Best regards.

[D]

" I pleaded with God but he turned a deaf ear." If there's a god, then by that line he knows why I won't follow him. But...Looking at my own short life, and around everywhere...there's no solid proof of his existence...but there's still no proof that there's nothing beyond this life, these bodies...there's the big unexplored dark room, full of unanswered questions. So gods existence is debatable, between sceptics and believers, but neither side can prove itself right....Therefore I'm thinking we'll find out about it some day. There's certainly something beyond this ridiculous, awkward world...otherwise we wouldn't have souls, feelings, empathy, love, awareness or LIFE. (I apologize if someone doesn't have any of that.lol) we'd be just bodies driven by their own needs...(a lot of people live like that, makes me wonder...) Anyway...I don't know how, but a few years back I lost faith in God. Not the things I've been taught. just the feeling I used to have while praying...it all felt like getting ditched...life turned even uglier,so I stopped hoping. idk what would drive anyone to keep belief...when everything shows that he believes in a fairytale, or has false beliefs about something...Or thinks he knows facts, but has no way to tell if those facts are true, or just made up. sorry for the essay long babbling.. lol

[Pete]

A physicist who doesn't believe in God told me that he only believes in what science can prove. So I asked him to explain our knowledge/sense of right & wrong even though science can prove neither. Where does that moral compass come from along with soul, feelings, empathy, love, awareness or LIFE, etc. as you say? This is a discussion that goes on and on and on. Thanks for your honest review. I wonder how you would feel/how your life would be if you reconsidered? Appreciated.

[D]

I don't really know...I'll have to go and see, until then it's all just a "what if" you're welcome.

[Savannah Willis]

This poem is a very touching piece!

[Pete]

Thank you so much.

[Cynthia Sharp]

Powerful! I can relate with so much with the narrator's journey! Beautifully and evocatively expressed!

[Pete]

Thank you Cynthia, I appreciate the review and welcome, I enjoyed your writing!

[marilyn 1225]

;;you write like you have done so for years with polish and emotion great talent and work

[Pete]

Thank you for reviewing. You are too kind. Thank you for the teaching you did and welcome!