Who is she?

self discovery, darkness to light. This is the first poem i have written in about 8 years :O

Who is she i must know
the girl who lost her smile not so long ago.

I see her in there deep inside
behind the books she likes to hide.

No one knows the life she's had
never knowing she was really that sad

Walls built up to keep them out
so much pain but never a shout.

Her eyes grew cold
due to the lies that were told

A broken heart
that was shattered apart.

I see her everywhere I go
and slowly her spirit starts to glow

Time started to heal her wound
and in the light she was finally consumed.

A smile appears slowly like a ghost
and in her books she is no longer engrossed

Who is that girl i must know
I look in the mirror and it is me that was shown.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

memory of a painful past that the poet/poetess went through... good to see her courage to stay strong... to be honest it didn't seem to that you wrote it after 8years....it reads very well and as barleygirl said the rhyming looks very good too... overall a very well thought out piece... full ratings!!!

[barleygirl]

I love the message of this poem & especially the conclusion. For most of this poem, the rhymes are a little simplistic & convenient . . . but then the rhyming becomes more sophisticated & natural-sounding in the last 3 stanzas. I understand this is your first attempt at writing a poem in a few years, so my next comment is only to enhance future poetry writing for you . . . quite a few of the statements are much-used generalities (sad life, so much pain, broken heart, etc.), which doesn't add any originality. When you write in specifics (hiding in a book), your writing is more powerful & relatable.

[sam]

thanks i just wrote it just to get thoughts out there. I appreciate your review and will remember it for the next time :)