Infected

You get into my brain

Like an infection you spread

You drain my strength

Can’t fight the feelings

Washing over my whole body

Digging deep into old wounds

Bringing to life the past

You infect my heart

Blood pounding

Rotting sweet memories

Like puss you ooze into my soul

Eating at it

Tearing at my being

I see the very things I hid

You bring them all back to life

Resurrection of forgotten feelings

 

I’m infected.

Author's Note

(This poem is not as dark as it sounds. When a wound doesn’t heal properly and its still infected, sometimes you have to reopen it for it to heal. I apply this to healing from past events in life, learning not to forget, but actually heal and move on. Of course, this poem was also inspired by an infection I have, a thing I am having in my life, a church service I went to today and a few people whom I know have a bad past… I hope I don’t offend them with this poem. I am not sure how well this poem will go as far as reviews, but please do let me know how you feel, just please be constructive and give honest opinion.)

I hope you understand this as I wrote it and not as it sounds, i was not sure how to really explain it.

Reviews

[AK]

That was nice, nice shape it is written in:)
If you want constructive criticism...well the poem is really nice, but I just feel at some places it is really poetic and full of imagery like rotting sweet memories. At some places you go real casual like you get into my brain. It would really help if you rearrange the words, replace some words with others depending on whether you want your poem to be in colloquial and raw English or in poetic and deep English. For your poem I guess a poetic touch would be good.
And do add punctuations, it will really help increase the quality of your poem. Please, I hope I haven't overdone the criticism. If I have I'm really sorry, I didn't mean to hurt you at all.

[FelicityAllona]

This gives me an image of a person severely suffering from a broken relationship or something more. Though that person wanted to move on, something always reminds him/her of that pain.

I do agree with AK that you should rearrange the words and use some punctuation marks too. :))
I hope you'll not mind if I gave an example. :)

"You are like an infection,
Into my body you spread."

But nonetheless I love the idea of your poem. :)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

This could be taken in more ways than just one, and one of them being very lightly. Not dark at all, but could also be taken as such. Nice write.

[☮Lizzie❤]

dark is not the word here.. its more twisted and creepy

[Jordan's Back]

Can’t fight the feelings
Washing over my whole body
Digging deep into old wounds
Bringing to life the past

Epic................................

[Eleanor]

I really liked this. Thanks for sharingg
-Eleanor

[Amila Jay]

Well, trying to heal from old wounds just brings more pain and the more you dig it the more it re freshens, best to let it be forgotten with time. A great write:)

[Regrets]

Really nice write. Thanks for sharing.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

you conveyed youself real well...

this can serve as a nice romantic piece too

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I believe that this is the Bitter side of love.. you have conveyed this raw emotion well. Nice write.