The Last Letter

Hi...everybody each human tries his best to get back the lost love. Please do emphasis on the last line....

Hey baby, i was trying to be, you ever wanted me to be
and i'm sick of bloody transitions you always wanted to see
back times....having you in my life
baby you filled my life with bad and beautiful vibes....

Each time you crossed my mind
my eyes are full of memories lying behind

Don't lie, you never wanted me by
U could have asked me for life instead of stabbing behind

Baby you never cared, i was so scared
Baby i told You had a dream of loosing you
You were the one who said, bad dreams never come true

What i`am going through the things never c0nsidered you
You left the home for what I never did to you

Baby I apologize, i'll not d0 it again
Please come back home and reduce the pain


Hope this last letter brings a flip in your mind
Baby just look around i'am standing behind.....:'(

Reviews

[S]

a heart felt plea...its beautiful

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a lot of hidden story and emotion. I like the desire to renew a friendship. I like the description and the story in this very strong poem of emotion and need. I like how you ended this excellent poem.
Coyote

[sarah]

Oh my goodness this is so...emotional! I love it!

[Siddharth T]

Lovely poem. Really brings out the feelings in the reader....

[Thea]

Sounds poignant...It has a good flow and the choice of words are great...You write with all your heart, as what I can see...Overall, this is a job well done...Keep penning... :)))

[Linear]

No matter what the languages used to express heartache, the reader will always see the pain, well written

[TheElfPrincess]

A sad, beautiful write. The descriptions were very vivid and the emotions were real. Well done, I loved it.

[Alexander Mccarthey]

Your descriptions are really nice. You don't say things in the conventional waay, instead the reader infers what you mean, making them think about the poem more. I've always considered that to be a sign of a good poet.

I think this would be lovely if it were read aloud as a spoken word poem. The rhyming scheme is very freestyle and breaks the boundaries; I like a good rule breaker ! The message was clear as to what you were trying to say, everything was good.

[Megan]

once again you astound me with your poetry! I really love this write and it's another to add to my collection of favorites :) I love the way you use "behind" throughout this poem like you're standing behind her, like in her past, while you make it obvious you want to be standing beside her. I also want to know what "you left home for what I never did to you" means. It really caught my attention while I was reading, it stood out the most, I think, because the rest is asking for her back, but this sounds more like an apology. Well I may never know what it really means but I still love the way it sounds :) soooo good!!! thanks for posting prodical