A SILENT GOODBYE..

itz a sort of conversation between two spirits....when a person is not ready to accept the fact that he is dead what happenzzzz...read along..

ME: why m i being dragged off
where are you taking me
set me free, let me go
my love is waiting for me

SOUND: stop your breath, close your eyes

noone is there waiting for you
wake up from the dream, watch yourself

and find out who are you..!!

ME: oh! who i'am and where i am??
my sound crackd out loud

SOUND: set yourself inside the little grave,
you are not allowd to move out

ME: hey! where did you bring me????
why is it so stifling here??

SOUND: you are nomore a part of living world..
just lie down..close your eyes

 you can rest in peace over here

ME: no!! just let me go
my love wouldn't sleep without my night rhyms

SOUND: huh! she has learned to sleep, learned to smile alone
it's been long time

ME: hey! how much time has passed by,and why have i been sleeping for so long?

SOUND: it's been several decades from dusk to dawn
you are at peace,at rest after a long imprisonment of being used upon.

ME: HUH! you old perilous man
watch my love walking towards me.. ♥♥

SOUND: you are a life away from her,it happens each day to me!!
look at the tears rolling down,the shivering steps moving slow.
who says inside the grave you live happily..i know how hard it is to see your love falling low.

ME to my LOVE: heY!! y are you so down,y did you cry???
there was nothing i could hear else then my love screaming out in tears.... Y DID YOU DIE..??

AND BY THE LAST I GOTTA REALIZE....

it was A SILENT GOODBYE..!!..♥

Reviews

[Tavionna]

This very sad, but completely awesome.

[prodicallife]

Hi Tavionna,

I am blissed to read you felt the same, what I tried to do deliver through my writing.

What could be best for a writer than this.

Thanks a lot for your gracious and appreciating feedbacks.

Stay blessed.

Regards
Prodical

[Sid]

Very interesting write, you have touched on a subject not often discussed and in my opinion you have done great justice to it. I really like the ending because it seems to carry a sad message...great work!!

[prodicallife]

Thanks a lot Sid

Your words mean a lot, and it's my honor that you read my work thanks a lot.

Regards
Prodical

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is an intriguing piece... the dialogue between the two spirits are emotionally charged. Intense! There is a profound sadness in the end. Nice work!

[prodicallife]

Robbbie

Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing my work, your words just gave a fleet to my confidence.

Thank you
Regards

Prodical

[Xicor]

Got flown away with the feelings ! Nice ! :)

[Ruth]

Wow! Unique topic also...this has moved me love...truly amazing piece! Such intensity of emotions roll through this...extremely well thought out also...a fav! xx

[sarah]

the structure is really great and it is just so wonderful!

[aviiar:))]

gosh..it made me say out loud a big ¨WOW!!!¨
i´m a big fan of yours..i love it.!:))
i hope i could write poems too like u do..

[MYSELF]

Poetry in a form of conversation is a real hard work to make..
but you did justice to the work and i would really appreciate
I am an immature writer not much knowledgeable about literature nor is it my stream but all i can make about is this piece of art is damn good..
:D

[Linear]

Writing in a language that is not your own brings difficulties I can't comprehend.

But your words transcend that barrier Realy well, and though I'm not a believer in this afterlife I still enjoyed the read :0)