'Be Mine..'

'Be Mine..'

A Poem by Priyankaabhilaashi
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Evacuating differences and lightning up a new light..

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"My nights and blues..
'Can we use some glues'..
Translating few stories..
May light up new glories..

Lovely verdicts lasts long..
Mustard uttering candy song..
Rubbing an Ayurved herb..
Time to patch the rough turf..

Issue needs to be dumped..
Happiness needs to be pumped..
Gush in, My Sweet Pineapple..
Time to locate unheard chapel..

Being secluded on cosy night does pay..
Imagine sun without the lovely ray..
Get in now the shades and be mine..
Who knows how long will moon shine..!!"

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© 2010 Priyankaabhilaashi


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Good visions create by your words. Many strong statements in the poem I likes.
"Rubbing an Ayurved herb..
Time to patch the rough turf.."
A amazing poem. I love powerful words. This outstanding poem I had to read a few times.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Thank you Zeitgeist_Manifesto..!!

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Thank you Cynthia..!!

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Thank you Charles..!!



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Thank you Coyote..!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I found this poem to be quite profound.
You have used some elegant ways to express
the cleansing of the mind and laying claim to
prosperity by purifying the spirit as well.

The energy of this work is comforting and it
seems to have healing properties that bled from
the pen.

I wonder if you will ever be whole again. I believe a
piece of your spirit was captured in these words.
You will live on forever.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I find it a bit hard to review your work - the style is so distinctive (it must be part of you, but it's still hard to read). The stanzas seem to have internal cohesiveness, but seem quite unrelated to one another. I don't have a feel for the punctuation yet, either. Then, too, it's hard to tell whether some of the sentence structure is part of the style or an English equivalence issue. At any rate, keep writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not going to lie, this is pretty great.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wonderful...
'Happiness needs to be pumped...' I like that!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Again, the improvisational feel to your poems is enjoyable. A dance, a whisper, a look, a laugh. All coming together in your mind and translated for us to read. Coolness.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Added on December 22, 2010
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Priyankaabhilaashi

Jaipur, India



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A traveller by choice..A writer by soul..!!!! A freelance writer..A Doctorate..A Management Graduate..!!!!! Born and brought up in Jaipur, The Pink City. You may read me here also: http://enri.. more..

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