'Whisper sheer raw..'

'A Lovely Bonding..amidst a Warm Night..!!!'

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"Few exotic fragrance..

Few floral reference..

Folding cold difference..

Warming up the mantle..

Inhaling intoxicated handle..

Fables rule feverish rental..

Exuberant Blackberry Cookie..

Philosophical passionate Bookie..

'Whisper sheer raw, my Rookie'..

Out-gunning joyous light..

Breaking shackles tonight..

Dwelling amusing fight..

A pre-functional tile..

Happily untraveled file..

Jigging journey smile..

Invincible constructive faith..

'Ah! You are illuminative, mate'..

'Hold me, you are already late..'

A Midnight creamy affair..

Perching pure unheard layer..

Stroking her long wavy hair..

Grooving authority released..

Intelligent mimicry unleashed..

Uncomfortable bends deceased..

Soft, silky, gentle tranquilizer..

'Your touch is truly energizer'..

'Endure peace and relax, my dumb miser'..

Fulfill gratifying plum-cake..

Lying by a profound lake..

Time ripe for smooth serene bake..

As we lay by each other..

Intensity slices further..

Sparkling blossom budder..

Curly sheets and rejoicing feet..

Creating some memorable feat..

Crushed mystified wrinkled heat..!!!"

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Reviews

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you not your typical girl..!!

[MissWordSmith]

not one line makes any sense. I'm sorry I'm not giving you reviews that say
''WOW, that was awesome!'' ... I WILL do that when you start writing SENSE.. and not just try to put together RANDOM WORDS that have no meaning.


''Grooving authority released..'' WHAT does that mean to you?
''Few floral reference..'' what is a FLORAL REFENENCE?
''Inhaling intoxicated handle..'' INTOXICATING HANDLE? what on earth does that mean? or signify?


''
A pre-functional tile..
Happily untraveled file..
Jigging journey smile..'' WHAT does any of that mean?????

Try writing something SIMPLE and something that makes sense. I'm sorry I'm being harsh... but I alwaya say what I think and don't gush over stuff that doesn't make any sense. However, if you need any help whatsoever I will be here to help.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you Cherrie Palmer Madam..!!

[Cherrie]

this is wonderfully descriptive and visual

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank You Revolutionary..!!!

[Revolutionary]

I like your style.It is all your own.THe poem flows well but I do not think that I am gifted enough with metaphore to understand parts of it

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank You D.J.Lutz..!!

[D.J. Lutz]

Very nice. I had to read it several times, each time gaining a little different insight. Thought provoking, indeed. Thank you for sharing.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank You Mary Harrison..!!

[Marie Harrison]

Steamy hot, sexy write! Love it!