Breeze

Little miss misty breeze
Hard to tell,u make me sneeze
Ur everywhere. Over here and there
Over the meadows grazed by my lazy mare

Over the hills she blew my hat off
I wish I could chase her with my grandad's staff
And how do you think those palm leaves dance?
On the seashores o'er the vast expanse

Please do pity the old man Mr.Rolf
His blanket is torn and he suffers from cough
She stole my clothes from my backyard
And also ruined my cousins birthday card

I never wanted vengeance because
I'm helpless without such invisible paws
Naughty miss breeze you are
Am sure you are listening to my guitar

Author's Note

Soooo...wat do you think?

Reviews

[78Jon]

Nice. Cute poem. Had a good rhyme scheme to it. Poems that rhyme are great.

[Ashwin Thakur]

It made me think of Ruskin bond
Beautiful poem.....

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice visions create by the poem. I like how you used the wind. Gave life and story to the breeze causing problems. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Priscilla Nishi]

thank you :)

[Ashira Macy]

I really enjoyed your personification of the wind, it was very charming, and your wording was gorgeous.

And how do you think those palm leaves dance?
On the seashores o'er the vast expanse

These lines called out to me. I loved that you used "o'er" instead of "over", it adds a little extra class to your writing style.

One suggestion is that I wouldn't use text slang. If you change the "u" to "you" and the "ur" to "you're" then you are golden. Beautiful job dear.

[E.G. James]

This is awesome. And fun to read ; )

[Priscilla Nishi]

Thank you James :)

[E.G. James]

You're very welcome :)

[Avanthika]

good, simple, describes naughty activities of the breeze.

[Priscilla Nishi]

Thank you for your feedback Avanthika

[raj24]

its a beautiful picture of nature.. cold misty breeze.. beautifully written.. an image that just gives you lots of peace and makes you go out and feel the air... thanks for sharing :)

Raj

[Priscilla Nishi]

Thank you ..I am a great admirer of nature.. It really gave me the push to think of all the comical things it could do..I'm very glad u liked it