Princess and her dream

A princess dreams about the guy she adores not knowing why she's dreaming of him

A princess dreams about the guy she adores not knowing why. She's seen him before in a show he's really popular all over the world. When she dreams she's really happy, they look so close nearly in love, he smiles hugely at her while she gives him the same look, they have fun like little kids. He shows her a good time having freedom no problem at all, they seem to have chemistry like they've met before, see loves him more than anything and loves him like the world, she doesn't know why she's dreaming if him all the time. They seem really close nearly in love. He shows her freedom and so much happiness that nothing in the world can break them apart. She loves him more than anything she feels like they've met before, the way he is with her is best friends and really close, they fool around and laugh having no worry, she dreams of him at night not knowing why , she's looking for answers on why she's dreaming of him.. She wants help knowing why she's having these dreams.

Reviews

[Danielle]

I got your request to review this, so here goes. This reads more like a quick synopsis of a work in progress. You need to provide "scenes" that show, rather than tell, the emotions and general view of these characters. There are a few repeated lines which tend to take away from the piece instead of adding to it. Especially in poetry it is more important sometimes to let it be real but also give it depth, meaning, some kind of symbolism that evokes the emotion it's showing. I hope you edit and revise this since the subject is very sweet and endearing. Hope this review is what you were looking for as this piece has been thoroughly reviewed and I don't believe I'm adding anything new. As always, return the favor :) Keep writing!

[Vidya Bacchus]

I am assuming that the princess has fallen in love ?Your poem is very human and emotional i like.

[Elena]

Thank you and it's my first time right these pieces but I'll take all of your advices!, and I did this on my iPhone so that's why there may be some typos here but thank you !

[Tom]

Perhaps the Princess has grown weary of her artificial existence and yearns to break free from the shackles of royalty, the thought of being with someone unburdened and 'real' overwhelms her continually, hence the expressive dreams ??

An imaginative, fantasy poem, maybe more true to life than at first appears ???

[flowetry07]

I enjoyed this piece however I do think there are some things which could make it a bit stronger. For example rather than " he smiles hugely at her while she gives him the same look," You might say something like " the corners of his mouth nearly reach the crinkled twinkle in his eyes while the expression on her face is a direct reflection of his". Or something without an adverb. I do think this is a strong piece and full of emotion, but I also think constructive criticism is important for any any writer who wants to improve. I hope you check out my writing as well and provide the same. Any way good work.

[wordman]

well it seems to me she and he had a relationship in a past life
and that's why they are drawn together in love on one sight dreams of him every night

[Diana]

I like this, but try to do more "showing" with your words. How does he show her freedom and happiness? How does he show her a good time?

[aneeqa]

Unfortunately, I am one of de least romantic teens bt den also I cn tell u its quite simple and perhaps de deepest of ur emotions.....good work...

[Inspiring Writer]

I think because she's been fallen in his love .. that's why she's thinking of him all the time.

hey.... you've typed wrong here ..in this line... check it out'
she's dreaming if him all the time .. replace it with She's dreaming of him all the time.

I liked the piece. Well writtten... it's just what you felt you dropped into words. I hope that girl's not you that's in the poem .. and if ya are then all the best for your love.
May god bless you.

[Aristede Craig Jr]

If you want something it may appear in vision or dreams...you may enjoy these dreams so they keep coming...Nice write keep getting your emotions out and then shape them and become one