am lost,am jailed.

the day i saw you,it was the most memorable day of my life,i can't breathe without seeing you,no seeing you in a day or not hearing your voice it feels like am in hell,i that i dont care about others,before i do anything i think about you,i that love to study and work,am now always thinking about you.

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

It's a beautiful poem. My only advice could be that you should apply some structure to it, maybe inserting an enter between each comma, and checking the grammar. I downloaded an app called "Grammarly" on my google chrome navigator, and it helps me a lot because it checks your spelling and grammar errors, why don't you download it?

[Coyote Poetry]

Need and love. Sort of a prison. A good one but. Nice use of thoughts led to the good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[lightflower14]

please without review i can not know what's wrong so kindly read and tell me because i feel it incomplete or there is a feeling absent there.thanks for your support.