Descreption

A Description explains mistrust of love
touched the heart to read so versed.

One read their poem that followed.
However, it did not fulfill expectation
and so;

I see a face, it will not speak
I see the sea, its calm as can be
I feel the wind, gently teasing thee
I see an orchestra, silence hear, did not attune

A poem, with such, well versed lines:

It has no spirit, that driving force
It has no soul, inner depth
It has no emotion, agitation

Is the mind free to please
to do as it pleases?

I see an apple, it has no core
I see a heart, it does not beat
I see those words, they do not call

Alas’ now, oceans of poems

An opinion did one not ask
However’ now, surely the past

Most important, one wrote thy poem
Surely enjoyed sensuous pleasure

Expectations high �" Such a low
         au pied de la letter

Was one’s heart saddened by a
story in the description of a broken
heart.                   au revoir…………

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

As I read your lines John they are full of a reminiscent feeling that it adds like a dimension of its own. When you describe the poem that did not fulfil it is as if even after going through the meaning something is not quite there. Then you let me know the meaning that wasn't present before. Finnaly the posibility that the words did not contain sufficient meaning becuase of a heavy heart.

Thankyou

[John Preston]

Yes, I was not not aware that it might be the story of a broken heart.
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