more than I deserved...

reality

i will not forget anything,

all the harsh memories i have preserved,

you hurt me more than i deserved.

firstly so many dreams,

then so much pain you served,

you hurt me more than i deserved.

Author's Note

all the reviews are welcome

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
I can relate to this piece unfortunately,
but I have also hurt others more then they
deserved, so I call it even:( Thanks for sharing
and b-blessed!

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank u very much sir

[Destiny Dreamer]

Ahhhh... felt this one very DEEPLY!!! I am like "OH Meray muuh ki baath cheen li" :D Thanks for writing such a touchy Poem.

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

glad u liked it

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I see pain in all words. You expressed all your feelings with a strong bold start that's more than I deserved...

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank you g

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome!!!!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Ignore it Preet... people who hurt you dont deserve your attention.... ignore them and move on... its good that you let the pain come out through your words...good poem

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

yes i try bt its not a easy task nd thank u very much

[prajakta]

nice write..short and impressive!:)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank you g

[prajakta]

ur welcome ji..:)

[Prashant Pandey]

Just bcz I m loosing doesn't mean m lost
Just bcz m hurting doesn't mean m hurt.

Whenever I get hurt I listen dis beautiful song of Coldplay. Thnx for reminding dis. Ur poem is simple and short but depicts a lot of pain and emotions. Good work.

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank you sooooooo much sir

[Shubham Joshi]

No body deserves to get hurt and yet we are hurt. That's the primitiveness of being human.

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

yes.i agree

[Elisa]

"Some wounds are too deep, and they never seem to heal."
I think that rings true, despite society's efforts to encourage forgiveness. There are just some wounds that go too deep. Thank you for this poem. I'd just like to suggest one tiny thing. In lines three and six, I would change "hurted" to "hurt". Again, thank you for this poem.

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank u very much

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

i corrected it

[Elisa]

Cool! No problem :)

[J.R.H.]

Short and sweet! Thx for the read!

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

thank yuo g

[Abilash Uttama]

short and nice, pain is important for growth so it is essential. we feel bad at beginning but at the end we realize this is how it should be :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

is there any mistake ??

[Abilash Uttama]

2nd last line me then

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

ohh! ya its mine mistake. kya aap mujhe tutns doge ??

[Abilash Uttama]

sorry dear, i can't :(

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

kyu ?? m not a good student or aap mujhse gussa ho ??

[Abilash Uttama]

actually i'm not a good teacher aur April me mein bahut busy rahunga aur tumse kis baat ka gussa?read moreactually i'm not a good teacher aur April me mein bahut busy rahunga aur tumse kis baat ka gussa?

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

u knw ur english is very nice

[Abilash Uttama]

you are mistaken dear :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

mean ?????

[Abilash Uttama]

meri bhi english sahi nahi hai itni:)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

ooooooooooooooooooooo. chal jhoothe