BEAUTY OF LIFE

This is a Than-Bauk. The Than-Bauk is Burmese and has Three lines, four syllables each. And the fourth, third and second syllables respectively all rhyme.

It's a bright day
as I lay here
with gay memories

                               Watching the trees
                               as the breeze play
                               with teasing arms.

                      Flowers at brink
                      of rosed pink; dipped
                      in ink of hues.

                                In azured skies
                                Butterflies flit
                                With ties of love.

Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.

Author's Note

My first Than-Bauk so please bear with me. An kindly suggest improvements.

Reviews

[Augustus]

Interesting write...I was unaware of this verse form...A good attempt...The picture accompanying the poem is also very nice...Perhaps the use of all that colour in the lines was unwarranted...Also, I feel the grammar is off in a couple of places. You've made use of good imagery, but I feel it can be done better...There have been so many poems written on nature over centuries, so in order to establish your uniqueness, I feel you must add that special ingredient of your own, which I found missing here.
Nevertheless, its a good poem...you can only get better with time...Keep writing... :)

[Vin]

this is beauty. keep writing.
Much love!

[ashish hajagulkar]

nice thinking and deep in life point of view

[Srishti Agrawal]

Nyc lines... ....................

[Daniel]

Great job, although the colors wasn't needed but other then that it was great.

[Pooja Sharma]

Nicely written! I like these lines.
Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.
Tells you that life has the element of beauty in it!

[Prashant Pandey]

nicely written... alluring expressions

[prachi prangya agasti]

nice and lovely.. expressions used are very nice!!

[Pradeep Nair]

dear happy-go-lucky rebel,

You are really good.

"Watching the trees
as the breeze play
with teasing arms." _ Beautiful expressions.

[Chance-Taker]

I really like thi,s it's so simple and yet so elegant!

[thundergod]

liked it......