THE TWO SIDES OF A COIN

The clash of Good and Bad - whether internal or external - is an ongoing process .....

Good waited patiently. Anytime soon ..... He had remained silent too long to avoid ugly confrontations with Bad. But the line had been crossed. As the hands of the ugly clock struck twelve, Bad collapsed into the room, his condition worse than pitiable . ( 38 )

 " Good, I never thought ........ "  ( 4 )

 " Never instigate good. Because if he loses his goodness, the aftermath wouldn't just be bad but downright ugly. " ( 17 )





No of Words : 59

Author's Note

This short story was written for the GBU BIZZARO competition. It has not turned out as well as I would have liked it to . But the no of words was a bit of a constraint.

Plz not : Counting of words does not include articles. Atleast that is what our English Professor told us.

Reviews

[Mr.Nick]

This is really interesting to read. Made think like crazy. I think though if you added ambiguity to the story it would have a much deeper meaning. I think pronouns such as he, take away from it in that sense. But other than that, it's really excellent.

[JNEthridge]

I didn't get it. Did I lose some characters?

[Warrior]

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end. I feel the same way when I watched a movie or tv series that I get so attached to, I never want it to end. And for this writing, I didn't want it to end. You had me hooked, and I am sure everyone else who read it was hooked as well. That is good, that is what you want for people to keep wanting more. The way you put the story together makes me feel like my life is different for that moment in which I read your story. I love it, and it was beautiful. Just keep posting stories like this, and you'll have a good following.

[sawreese]

Interesting read no doubt, but I do not think the last segment flows well with the first two. It seems to be restating the obvious in a way. As with the review that was featured when I read this piece, a little ambiguity would go a long way in the first two segments, or either just the last one. I'd keep it to one of those two groups to avoid making the piece seem like rabble, but this is just my opinion. Great read all the same.

[Ł σ s s σ ғ Ł α �..]

Wow! This piece really leaves you thinking. Makes me really want to know what happened, what is going to happen and so on.

[Theresa]

It definitely leaves you thinking. I believe those are the best stories the ones that have you thinking way after you have read the last word. I think this could even be (if you choose to that is, since I know it was for a contest) longer. You have something here. A great write.

[K@lp@n@]

so much hidden thoughts in it. amazing. best of luck

[hello1]

too good. deep. best of luck. or should i say congrats!

[Rochser]

Amazing story. So much is left to the user to think about. You write such deep and profound works. I really like reading your work!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well done! Story told in so few words.

[Rosalyn Kae]

Interesting concept. It's impressive! I like the vagueness of it. It's leaves things open to interpretion. The best stories force the reader to think. I think it's really deep and that picture is AMAZING looking.