THE STRANGER

inspired a bit by the spate of suicides being reported in the paper......

Fed up of the woes, troubles and defeats -

From them finding no place to hide,

Dejected and defeated I decided one day,

To finally commit suicide.

I thought of the possible ways

and then decided at last,

I would jump from the nearby hill,

and end my life fast.

Just as I was about to

accomplish this horrendous task,

I heard an old man's voice :

"My son, a question, may I ask ?

Why do you want to fling yourself

and end your precious life,

Why not have some poison,

Or why not use a knife ?

"You think by jumping ,

Death will be less painful,

But you forget the fact that

the act of suicide itself is shameful.

Tell me , what problems you have,

which you cannot solve ?

Every problem has a solution,

To solve it you must resolve.

I am Mr. Portigo

and I live in the nearby village,

TRY TRY TILL YOU SUCCEED :

a lesson I have learned through the age."

I felt ashamed of myself

on acting like a coward.

The old man's wise words

had made me feel empowered.

I turned around to thank,

Mr. Portigo, the old man,

But he was nowhere to be seen,

though I tried as much as I can.

I went to a nearby bar

and asked about Mr. Portigo,

"Oh him", said the waiter sighing,

"He committed suicide long time ago".

Author's Note

do let me know the mistakes, even if they are grammatical.

Reviews

[Lorraine]

The ending created an unexpected and creepy twist. It's as if the ending suddenly made the whole poem a lot more meaningful and motivating than I expected it to be. The only thing I find weird in this is the lack of strong reason for the speaker to actually commit suicide. I don't really think his reasons are strong enough to commit such thing. Anyways, still a beautiful piece.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[K@lp@n@]

amazing poem. great flow and rhyme. go girl !

[hello1]

amazing poem

[Rochser]

wow! Amazing. also scary in a way. i have observed that most of your works give a message. well done