peace at its best

it is time when i found purest form of love,its not love at first sight,but its pure feelings.I already got this printed it in my college annual magzine.

You are like pure breeze in midnights of December...,

You are like pure deep blue water of ocean...,

You are like village utopia far from town,

You are like long walk on beach alone,

You are like my precious silence in temple...

 

Yes it’s all true,

You are the only peace, serenity that I was looking for from long ago,

But still its true that you are only air that can be felt but can never touched,

You are only the water of ocean that can be admired but can never be drunk,

You are only utopia far from reality

You are only my god that can only be praised but can never be seen.

Author's Note

please give me true feedback so that i can know how efficient I'm.its also my first attempt at poetry.

Reviews

[Ritesh]

quite nice, u mst ve a try to write about serenity of jodhpur,

[Vikrantsingh]

Good Flow and Better Piece of Writing Mate :)
Enjoyed it :)

- Singh :)

[prashant harsh]

thanx foh review :)

[Leandro Mendez]

first attempt at poetry? you're a natural! :) great work!

[prashant harsh]

yeap it is my first attempt thnx foh ur comment :)

[Frieda P]

Ah Utopia, Shangrila, Edeb and the likes, it's a beatiful dream, your poetry takes me places, intriguing thoughts and beautifully written, like this one.

[prashant harsh]

thnx

[Another Poet]

Beautiful! very good and I love the poem.

[prashant harsh]

thnx its so nice of you

[Another Poet]

your welcome!

[Dana Alsamsam]

I enjoy the unique images that you use; they're rather intriguing! my one comment would be not to reuse imagery. the image of a utopia is a wonderful one that you pull off well. there is no need to repeat it again in the second stanza. Great work!

[prashant harsh]

thanx foh comment

[Roopal]

nice write up. i really liked it. :)

[prashant harsh]

thanx :)

[SyberRose]

Lovely words...and keep writing and thanks for the read request:)

[prashant harsh]

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