O Crystal Moon

I look at the crystal moon

Wonder is it a curse or a boon

No one to accompany him

Nothing to solace him soon

 

He stands there a still

Looking at the world beneath him move

Generations emerge and go

But has sheltered in its own groove

 

He looks at a little kid being nurtured

Then he sees every heart being tortured

All he does is shine softly

Without any hint of envy

Again, I look at the crystal moon

Wonder is it a curse or a boon......

 

Quietly fades away during the day

Be it early winter or brimming May

Peeking through the dark black sky at night

With a benevolent arch smile

Albeit, lonely and aloof

Seldom does it go out of sight

Once again I look at the crystal moon

And wonder is it a curse or a boon........

 

From asteroid to little stone

Assails its welcoming heart alone

Then again never has its serenity diminished

Or its existence vanquished

Im glad,

O, moon you are up there in the infinite sky

For else you could have long before died

As there is nothing here but else to cry

 

So,

I look at the crystal moon

Wonder is it a curse or a boon..................??

Reviews

[Lady of the Lake]

Well, first of all, I like your poem :) I like the idea that the moon might be suffering just as much as us here on earth because he has to watch us suffer all the time. The idea is beautiful - that he would care - and sad - that he would have to suffer at all :(
The only constructive criticism that I can think to offer: it was a little confusing when you began the poem with "I" and then quickly switched to third person. I wasn't sure who you were talking about at first. So, I guess you could find another, more obvious way to show this transition to the personification of the moon (for people who are dense like me haha) or something like that. However, I don't think this is a major issue at all, and I'll leave it up to your better judgement as the writer of this lovely poem :)

[Deepankar]

thanx a lot 4 ur appreciation.......
yes the idea or to say thought was generally of the suffering n plight here among us watched by the moon day in day out........
I started it with the thought that He (moon) is lonely, alone.... but as it progresses I'm glad that its not here among us... else....
so that's what i wonder about the whole time........ :)
Anyways loved ur comment and ur kind appreciation too....

[Lady of the Lake]

No problem! It really is a lovely poem! :)

[Ency Bearis]

Noteworthy poem in a sense though a little bit confusing with the personification at the beginning but a good concept.

[Zoya Sahai]

It's a wonderful poem with a beautiful concept

[Kaitlyn]

Awesome job!

It's a cool concept, the idea of the moon, fixed as it is, having to watch the world grow and move. And yes, I can imagine that it would be very hard at some times, and very lovely at others.

Good read. Keep up the great work :)

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Praise-worthy :)

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Super rhyming and a beautiful description of moon...liked it.. :)

[Sanchari]

It's a great personification of the crystal moon & a great write up. Well done! Great Imagery.

[chaotic katie]

I like this piece, it flows so beatifully. great job.

[Deepankar]

Thank you... :)