The Vision

It's about everything a man pass through.

When I looked in my wall mirror..
Saw my face with blurry strange eyes..
My own eyes were always bright..
Might be that I ate lot of green vegs.
The face, of course belong to me,
But the eyes are totally strange for it.
Not of me, when I am in high 'spirits',
Neither when I had a f*g for soul...

Why the lights are out in my eyes?

Why they lost the charm they owned?
Why they missed the sparkling glee?
Why they are outlined with salt?

Might be someone snatched the light,
With the sparkling glee once they held.
Will I ever have that spark back,
With all charms once they worn..
The one who snatched the sparkle from me,
Will never know what that I miss.
Except that my eyes are strange,
I remain myself minus my charm.

Author's Note

Thanks in advance for your valuable reviews..

Reviews

[Lilly]

I really like this one!
For me, I know, I've met people who are somehow draining to be around. Maybe they were overtly negative or someone who would put you down... but you can feel the life, the sparkle, the charm disappear from your eyes and self.
'I remain myself minus the charm' -- love the ending.
Great poem

[Pradeep Nair]

I am honored... thanks a lot...

[AYVID N]

Sad how someone always comes along to take the sparkle away! A very inevitable inimitable part of life. Great comment! Regards, DN

[Pradeep Nair]

exactly.. that's life for me.. thanks a lot DN!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

an excellent poem...nice flow of thoughts

[Pradeep Nair]

Thanks a lot for your valuable review...

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is the first poem that I've read by you and I'm thoroughly impressed, too! It's unique and interesting at the same time. I like the whole idea of your eyes losing their charm or sparkle from something snatching it from you. The nice illustration made the piece even better! I can relate a lot to this poem though. My eyes tend to sparkle a lot in the sunshine. I have a very light brown to a hazel tint to my eyes. Sometimes it changes depending on my mood. I find it cool. But again, you done an excellent job! Keep up the good work! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Pradeep Nair]

The most valuable comment, I ever had.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to look into the mirror. We can see strangers sometimes. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. Life lead us to places where we must decide what is next for us in life? I like the reason and the purpose for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pradeep Nair]

the eternal questions asked by us..... wht is next for us?
Thank you Sir....

[Sami Khalil]

A thought provoking piece on visions written with suspence.
I like how you take the reader on a journey to know more and then keep us in suspence.
A good style.
Keep the vision alive.

[Pradeep Nair]

Thanks a lot for your kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.