Sea of Deception

Pain of a love lost in betrayal.

Lonely & inebriated, I think about you,
A tempest rages in my mind,
The ship of sanity totters with sails askew,
The land of hope, nowhere can I find.

Memories flooding my mind,
Wish I could drown in this stupor,
Amidst a raging sea, no place to hide,
A saving hand, none has to offer.

Adrift in this sea of loneliness,
Battered by the fury of the guide,
Staring into the depths of a whirling abyss,
To sink is the call of the mind.

Prolonged is this bottomless falling,
Hastened by the weight of rejection,
All resolve, in this pain seems to be failing,
Soul darkened by the blackness of deception.

Reviews

[Ally Monique]

Despite the lack of company out at sea, I've never felt alone. Memories of those I love are enough to keep me preoccupied. To me, the sea is a safe-haven, where I can escape the deception and corruption of the world. However, I have always loved the metaphor of the sea being a place to drown in loneliness & sadness, it fits well! :)
Rejection from those we love can bring us to dark places.

[Poetic Nuance]

The pain of a heart break can be overwhelming for some. So true your last sentence. Thank you for your comments. :)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Congratulations. A deserved winner.
This is a beautiful piece of writing.
There are times for all us when the world seems to turn against us. These times pass.
a lovely poem with superb sentiments.
Clive

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. I am very happy that you like it. :)

[Tricia Pattinson]

Beautifully expressed! Well Done! Congratulations!

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you very, very much. Glad you liked it. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing artwork and words. I like the use of the sea to mark your point in the poem. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I will return tonight and read some more.
Coyote

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much for your comments. Hope you will read my other poems & comment on it too. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Please send read request. I work a terrible schedule. I do read my read requests ASAP.

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. You read so many of my poems & gave reviews. My poems are generally not reviewed. I get maybe 1 or max 2. It feels really good to see more reviews. Thank you so much. I do not know how to send read requests though. I will though find a way to figure that out. :)

[Persona]

Even though this is a heart broken poem, your use of an interesting extended metaphor worked really well. Your vocabulary is good and the poem makes sense. The rhythm and how it looks on the page is very appealing. Thank you for sharing.

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much for your comments. And also for the award. Glad you like it. :)

[Persona]

You're welcome. Continue writing!

[WritersRankings]

I read this poem many times, it has a weight of innocence, despite the tone of suffering. I liked it that you kept it simple in a wonderfully framed exposition of the human experience.

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. Really appreciate this. :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Wonderful poem you really measured all depth in this! Like the the end "Soul darkened by the blackness of deception."

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much for your comments. :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

You deserve friend welcome!