I like the emotion, and the passion. Not all poems have to rhyme, or follow a certain structure, and meet a certain length. More of a story would help the reader, but as long as this piece of writing helped YOU sort some feelings out, then it's done what it should for you. Nice job and post some more work so we can help!
Its a good place to start the emotion is obviously there, it need some structure and a little more detail so we can understand the story some more...no worries, when I first started I was awful at poetry you'll get better :)
Okay you can feel the emotion so great start. The outline is incorrect, neigh is there a rhyming pattern *not saying there has to be*. Also, I don't know if it's incorrect or not but usualy in poetry there isn't punctuation. But I did like it, and I do know how you feel here. So it's relatable, and it's message comes across to the reader. So really good start. If you want any more advice, maybe if you're looking for new types of poetry I started a new type a little similar to others. So pm me, or comment on this anytime, and I'll be happy to help
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