Spirit of the Desert

There is no sound for the sweltering sun on sand
Beating back
The spirit of the desert.
No beat no heart.
The desert lizard
dead, red, hot.

Squeeze the water out of water.
Blind the sun.
The spirit of the desert has no mercy.
No beat no heart

Reviews

[Millionth Muse]

I like the feel of this piece, and the imagery was beautiful. I could feel the heat, see the sand, touch the lizard...you did a great job there. Not sure if I'm in agreement with the idea that the desert has "no beat no heart", but I can certainly see your point with it.

My only suggestion might be to mix things up a little and do something creative with the repeated lines "No beat no heart", either stand them out on thier own, italicize them...something to add a little movement, especially since this is inspired by music. Also, I think you need a comma between "No beat, no heart".

Overall, kudos to you for a good write!

[larryb]

Like this a lot....great flow A+

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

the imagery here linoleumrose is astounding! "squeeze the water"!!!!