Please, never leave

You're all I want and more
I don't know what I'd do if you walked out the door

I want you more than you even know
I never thought I'd let you take me by the undertow

I'll stay by your side
I'll be your guide

I'll smother you with my love
We'll fly higher than the doves

Words can't begin to explain
What I feel in my veins

I'll hold you tight
I'll never let you out of my sight

You're beautiful in every way
You make a sunset look grey

Written on July 11th, 2011 *(7-11-11)*

Reviews

[David Michael]

Thank you for writing it "grey"! Yes! I've always done it that way, and people told me that was weird and I should spell it "gray". Apparently I had always been doing the British spelling without knowing it...

Oh, in your second line I believe you have an unneeded "I" before the "you".

As to the piece, this does have glimmering beauty to it. I like the imagery it evoked. It's a nice change also from some of your more down pieces. Not that those are bad - it's always good to get emotions like those down on paper. But you know how after a lot of storminess and bleak clouds a ray of sun seems all the more wonderful? That's why it's so nice...

[Kestrova]

The last line brought the piece to a perfect close and summed up every statement beautifully. It's been a while since a poem has moved me the way this has. You have a knack with words!