short story:the sunflower

short story:the sunflower

A Story by portuguese_doggo
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this is just a prototype of the first part of this little short story I am trying to make but I would really appreciate some criticism

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It was a time before civilization
 in a time of silence and tranquillity, in a region never touched by Man 
there was a vast plain of land 
that extended  endlessly with luxurious flowers and wonderous animals
 the land  shinning with the bright colours of life
as if it was the garden of Eden itself
 but in the midst of such a spectacle, there was a mountain
 a humongous, bulbous rock that towered over the land
and like a needle pierced the purity of the bright blue sky
 strapped bare naked by the ruthless winds 
for not even snow would cover the ugliness of the charcoal rocks.
but it was there in the repulsive summit of that mountain that a sunflower bloomed.

© 2018 portuguese_doggo


Author's Note

portuguese_doggo
just speak without holding yourselves but try to avoid hate, and because of the fact English not being my first language, I would like some correction, in structure, grammar and etc...
thanks for checking my text out (;

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Added on August 28, 2018
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portuguese_doggo
portuguese_doggo

lisbon , Portugal



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I am a 17 year old, I live in portugal like my name states and english is not my firt language so sorry for any mistakes I might makes .I am not aspiting to be a writer of anything like that I just wa.. more..