The new vampie

Chapter 3-Vacation Surprise

     I didnt know where we was going.Then we stopped.''Where are we?''i asked.''We are in Canada,''he said ''OMG!Thank you!I always wanted to go!'' I squeavked happily.We checked in.I looked in my suit case.Fench tags again.I am really going to kill Alice now.So we did it for the first time as me a vampire.We went hiking,snowboarding,and swimming.Then my cell phone was ringing.It was Alice.''what wrong Alice?''I asked.''You have to come quickly!its about Rachel!''We hurried back to our home.I was scarred.

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[Hotaru Miyuki]

good! just a little suggetion. when u write your story, try to make it a bit longer. also paragraph it everytime someone else is speaking when it its a new person talking. otherwise.... nice job even though it is off the wall! lol!!! o and alos write down for the title of each chapter what chapter it is!