Broken Wings

inspired by a penny

Paint this picture

in your head

for this is the story of a girl

who was left for dead

 

Trapped in a small world

the only way out

was to spread your wings and fly

 

There the girl sat

alone with a little boy

the girls broken wings kept her

glued to the floor,

scared to the core

 

When the world turned,

the boy pushed back his fears,

spread his wings,

and learned to fly

 

He flew up and out

not stopping to think

of the little girl

who he was

leaving there to die

 

Still glued to the floor

with no clue what to do

now scared,cold, and alone

her broken wings

making her unable to leave

she started to heave

 

No one cared

for the girl

whos broken wings

kept her from being able to fly

so they left her there

to die...

Author's Note

so i was doing the dishes and my brother handed me a glass it had juice in it at some point in time but now there was just a penny and dime in it. I couldnt put it in the dishwasher because it was full so i had to wash it by hand i flipped over the glass and the dime fell out but not the penny the sticky glass made it impossible for it to come out and that was how this poem came to be. I thought its okay maybe a bit weird but tell me what you think please and thank you :)

Reviews

[Dexter Killian]

Wow,
something quite amazing rose from a penny sticking to a glass

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent inspiration that brought this well written poem to life!

[TheFemininePad]

Julie you have become quite an amazing writer. I remember when you first started using Writer's Cafe. I came back by the way. Your poem was heartbreaking. It reminds me of butterflies who try to fly for the first time, and sometimes it never happens. Thank you for writing this great poem.

[Short.Nerd]

I love how you got inspired to write this and I love this poem. It was absolutely wonderful. It had a very good flow. Keep up the good work:)

[sammyj]

i really like this piece. You've cornered the emotions and made them talk, telling the world what has been done. Now open the cage and let the lion out!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A tepid piece of spectacular writing, a well written piece, instant poetic jaunt, well done, great read.

[Katub]

Wow this is really beautiful, its well wrote and full of pain. You've really worded what its like to be left behind!! Well done

[Jesse Jacques]

nice job, julie. using the real world to relate to the world of words is genious.

[Eile MacIntyre]

I think it's got character. It's an excellent poem in my book. Being left behind is such a sad thing.

[L. Catherine]

awww i feel so bad for the girl, but great job :)