Conditions Of My Heart

This is my heart

you can't have it

but you can look at it

 

This is my heart

you ripped a hole in it

but you can't see it

 

This is my heart

your words are like a knife

slowly slicing it open

but you don't care

 

This is my heart

this is the piece

your knife cut off

everytime i sew it back on

your knife comes back

to slit it off

but that dosn't bother you

 

You're my older brother

now look at my heart

can't you see

you're tearing it apart?

 

This is my heart

here is a dart

you might as well,

take your best shot...

 

Reviews

[Jim Parson]

This is really very moving, Julie. I had to read it twice because of the emotional twist. As I read, my thought patterns were driven by the pain caused by a love. So when I got to the brother part, I had to start over and shift my thinking. It changed the poem completely. Nicely done!

(Want me to beat him up for you?)

[Eile MacIntyre]

I love this last verse!

[Grace Catherine C.]

Aw, mean brian, I liked it julie, especially the last verse.

[Sarah E. Pearson]

i love it. until the end, i thought it was about a lover of some sort.

[KAREN]

Love the emotions in this peice even though it is sad. Love the anger at the end too!

[Daydreamer54]

Wow, this is so sad! i like it though, great write! :)