The Nile of Denial

The Nile of Denial

A Poem by Emily Dickinson Jr.

 

 

 

The rolling of the Nile

Brings upon fresh currants of denial

 

To a land of rich, good things

Until innovation dries the springs

To empty deserts, misery people

 

Sweep the land, and they do nothing

 

These sheeple, these shameless sheep

Of once great people

 

The few shall rise

And the second change shall bring

Renewal, the filling of stone dry springs

 

But with good fortune comes a tint of tainted red

That churns stomachs and stains cheeks green

 

Across the yellow mountains hangs a crimson veil

To change/remain the same

Both fates bring

Destinies much to pale

 

But still the people keep on

In this land

Under the brightest yellow sail

© 2013 Emily Dickinson Jr.


Author's Note

Emily Dickinson Jr.
Please keep limits to flames of political opinion

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There is a deep and complex vein running throughout the poem. Although it takes the river Nile as its premise, I think this poem can in a broader sense, be taken to be one that describes the rise and fall of civilizations. The lines here speak about past glory and also about the present complacency / ineptitude. However, there is also a hopeful thread, where you talk about the "second change". But you add one more caveat, where, presumably you talk of the violence that is often associated with revolution. I loved the use of color throughout the poem to depict various notions. Overall I am quite impressed. You are a talented poet. Well done! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

I often do add subtle things like that, perhaps it's part of my style, but because of that people of.. read more
Augustus

11 Years Ago

There is always a fine line between subtlety and obscurity. Exactly where that line is, depends as m.. read more
Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

indeed :-D



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A very deep and sophisticated poem. I thought it was wonderfully written and quite enjoyed the vein of truth that ran through it. Great poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

Thanx Alexa I'm glad you enjoyed it. To tell the truth I'm happy yet suprised at how well this poem.. read more
Alexa Tasch

11 Years Ago

It too well written for people to argue about it :)
I love the different deep meanings this poem can produce and lead one down! Bravo on the great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

lol thank you my kind sir :-) I'm glad you enjoyed it
There is a deep and complex vein running throughout the poem. Although it takes the river Nile as its premise, I think this poem can in a broader sense, be taken to be one that describes the rise and fall of civilizations. The lines here speak about past glory and also about the present complacency / ineptitude. However, there is also a hopeful thread, where you talk about the "second change". But you add one more caveat, where, presumably you talk of the violence that is often associated with revolution. I loved the use of color throughout the poem to depict various notions. Overall I am quite impressed. You are a talented poet. Well done! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

I often do add subtle things like that, perhaps it's part of my style, but because of that people of.. read more
Augustus

11 Years Ago

There is always a fine line between subtlety and obscurity. Exactly where that line is, depends as m.. read more
Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

indeed :-D
I think my favorite line was "until innovation dries the springs"

Sheeple t-shirts:

http://jaxoons.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/08/sheeple-Ts2.jpg

Posted 11 Years Ago


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well, pretty you again fluttered me by your this writin', it's a nice piece. I loved your tittle i wanna say then as i did start to read, words that're so powerfful there in the middle, just made an impact on reader. you did great to let me know about your this writin'...lol couse i didn't wanna loose this read. Now i'm thinkin' why i read it out very late, why i did so delay to read such a piece...well, forget that, i read it...n enjoyed your " 5592 km long; "NILE", well, i didn't find people around the river...lol...
ohh, i think they're enjoyin' the NILE n swimmin' inside the middle of the NILE...lol
i liked your pic. too...i meant your this NILE'S pic..lol
you got it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it :-) I'm also very happy it left such an impact. It is short but in a way I t.. read more
Very well thought off and portrayed. You leave the reader in a conscious state of reflection. Great poetry indeed.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Your works are so well-crafted that you leave little to say in terms of technical criticism...more great poetry here :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

aww thankx kub I'm always happy to hear your input on my work :-)
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)
i really got some images erupting in my mind
well composed!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

wow Im glad it was so very effective for you! i love it hahaha
Nice job! I don't review much poetry, but this certainly caught my eye. Your stanzas are very organized and your flow is steady. Your message is a powerful one, whether people agree with it or not does not matter. You have presented your opinions smartly and beautifully. So good job! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

11 Years Ago

thank you so much. it always brings me pleasure when I get reviews from those that aren't prone to .. read more

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