A Ketchup Heart

 

You say you love me

It's a lie

 

You're the reason I cry inside

 

You ask what's wrong

I curse your soul

 

You're the reason I hurt

You hit a girl so small

 

Each hit I take

The smaller I get

The less I can take

The more I fake

 

One day I'll snap too hard

One day you'll see

The pain you gave

And I'll recieve

 

You said your guilty

But you saw I was alright

 

So you're not anymore

 

Your an adult so you must be right

This bleeding heart isn't real

 

It's only ketchup, right?

 

 

 

Reviews

[Deron Alexis]

well said Emily you really got you point across with this metaphor. Fantastic imagery and use of devices well written

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx deron I'm glad u think so

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem with a message. Can't abuse someone and expect them to be strong. We must be careful with words and actions. Dreams and goals can be killed in seconds. Thank you for the outstanding poem,.
Coyote

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

No problem coyote you know I try

[Aehr]

heartfelt emotions. loving the last stanza. It is a very straightforward and one-to-one kinda poem, and that's why I liked it :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you Rea! :-) I'm glad you like it. I'm a pretty blunt person sooo I guess it shows. the last stanza is my favorite to I thought it was kind of funny in a type of tragic way you know kinda bitter sweet?

[Aehr]

yes, i like bittersweet :D hehe If you admit that you're blunt: yep, it's showing, and it gives an absolutely different air to the poem (in a good way, of course) I like the dark feelings and the way they're expressed. relatable! :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hahaha well ... Excellent! :-D

[Aehr]

:)

[Aehr]

:)

[Akshita]

It's amazing...the way you put your feelings here is awesome...loved it :-)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it. humans are above all creatures of emotion and I am no exception

[Chaos_Collector]

Uncut goodness Emily. Very straightforward in this poem. I like it. "Each hit I take
The smaller I get
The less I can take
The more I fake" Excellent rhythm here. Many of us feel pain and we often fake being okay. Good relations. Always nice to see parts in a poem that others can connect to. The ending of this poem is quite the catch "You said your guilty
But you saw I was alright

So you're not anymore

Your an adult so you must be right
This bleeding heart isn't real

It's only ketchup, right?" Playing around with people as if they're toys. Obviously the person who you speak of is rather cold. Another great write by Emily

Chaos_Collector

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you chaos :-) I do pride yself at being a rather blunt person. personally the last line is my favorite part lol glad you liked it to. I'm glad you liked it

[Black Rose]

Amazing. I loved It

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm Rly glad u liked it

[Gray Witch]

I can understand abusive, it's poetry I have a problem with...That being said, I enjoyed this as it seemed to me to be more straight forward than most...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm a pretty blunt person it's just my way

[Tomi]

Wow, Sad; so sad. Amazingly Written!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx so much :-)

[R.M. Duchene]

I'm kind of all over the place with this one. One way I read it and it sounds like a lover scorned type of piece and the other way, an abusive situation... Thank you for sharing. Powerful as always :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Again I thank you my intent was an abusive relationship but as always my work is multifaceted