A Ketchup Heart

 

You say you love me

It's a lie

 

You're the reason I cry inside

 

You ask what's wrong

I curse your soul

 

You're the reason I hurt

You hit a girl so small

 

Each hit I take

The smaller I get

The less I can take

The more I fake

 

One day I'll snap too hard

One day you'll see

The pain you gave

And I'll recieve

 

You said your guilty

But you saw I was alright

 

So you're not anymore

 

Your an adult so you must be right

This bleeding heart isn't real

 

It's only ketchup, right?

 

 

 

Reviews

[S]

Strong hatred personified....

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yuppers some times you just gta let it all out :-)

[JulieMorgan]

Wow, what powerful imagery but yet, a melancholy tone! Well done, your words have captured the raw emotions....

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! totally what I was going for.

[Sarah Marie]

Wow....I love the emotion you put in all your writing. I can feel the pain and questioning. This is really great-sad-but wonderfully written, nonetheless!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx :-) I'm really not all that deep a person when you meet me though maybe I just keep it to my writing. :-) yeah a lot of my poems are sad but there are a few happy mixed in.

[Leigh]

Very sad and very well expressed

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you :-) glad it came across well I do aim to do so

[Saint No-One]

I love this. The breakneck pace at which the tone changes delighted me. It's reminiscent of standing outside when a blustery wind transforms itself into a storm.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

awesome! :-) I'm glad it took you away. I love to hear about people getting absorbed into it.

[Saint No-One]

This was absolutely destructive. The analogies you made were hard hitting, but neither those nor the title prepared me for the uppercut waiting in the final 3 lines. Beautiful.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thank you so much! :-) I like to use analogies and metaphors part of my style I suppose

[Joey Johnson]

This is my favorite piece that you have written, well done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

really? wow that suprised me a lot but I'm really glad you liked it :-)

[WhiteWillow]

Lovely analogies, a wonderful write. I really enjoyed it.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx I'm glad you liked it

[KAOlmsted]

Great job exercising those demons.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you

[KAOlmsted]

Any time.