A regret-filled prayer

this for those reading may be sad, but to me it is hope.

Why would a nine year old

Slit her wrists

 

What could make her whisper

"Please, end this."

 

How could the world

Betray her so

 

How come they

Numb her soul

 

What'd a small girl

Ever do to you

 

How would you feel

If you knew

 

That she was suffering

Wondering

"What'd I do?"

 

What if you knew

Your outlet

Never hated you

 

What if the scars faded

Away

 

Her bright emotions faded

To gray

 

And told you

"It's okay!"

But .....

"I still can't feel ...

To this very day."

 

and you regret it

And you pray

 

"My lord, Please!"

"Make it go away!"

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

 

Reviews

[~]

This is heartwrenching! It seems to me that this kind of thing is happening with younger and younger children these days. It is saddening.
A heads up: there are two typo's I spotted......1)line 3-wisper should be whisper. 2) line 17-you're outlet should be your outlet.
Well done, my friend.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol I'll fix that up in a jiff

[Admiral Kirk]

Wow, this is very heartfelt... So sweet... Very well written, my friend.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked it!! :-)

[Admiral Kirk]

:D

[♋ Iris ♋]

Very sad..very relatable as well. The word choice was excellent and pierced my heart with each word. Great write~!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm really glad you liked it!!! I always aim to be relateable

[Michael Soul]

i felt this and it hurt my soul
good pen ship will read over and over to see what forms in my mind to your words

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad!! You just made my day i love it when people deeply analyze my work!!!

[James William Dyer]

I think this one needs more visual imagery. I like how you took an intense personal feeling of someone else and tried to put the reader into a "viewing" perspective, but instead of the back-and-forth ( "what if you knew" then "...and told you "it's ok") I would try to make a clear jump from the object of pain to the audience. Enjoyable to read.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked the read