Hollie with an I and an E

A little girl tells her class how she knows what a gun is when her guest speaker asks.

 

 

 

 

       Mrs. Linden clapped her small hands twice and welcomed the silence that came instantaneously.

 

       "Class, We have a very special helper today! His name is Mr. Johnson. Say, hello."

 

       "Hello Mr. Johnson!" was the resulting echo from dozens of tiny voices.

 

       "Mr. Johnson, is here today to teach you how dangerous  guns are.  How many of you know what a gun is?"

 

          "It's a gray thingy that makes people bweed; I seen it in the howa movies." Chirped cheerfully out of the small body that had jumped up to answer the question.

       She had Brown, slightly frizzy, curled hair that went all the way down to her tiny bottom. It was only a shade or two lighter than black and had jumped with her when she answered. Her deep hazel eyes ringed in black, sparkled with the innocent want to be praised for her answer.

     " Excellent, girl! What's your name?" demanded the guest speaker.

      

        " Mista, My name's Hollie; with an I and an E!" squealed the young girl joyfully under all the attention.

   

     " Well kids, Hollie's right but only partly,"

 

She pouted at the correction.

 

     "they do make people bleed on TV, but they also do in real life.; they're dangerous.” he warned the class of four year-olds.

 

     “They's bad?" asked Hollie demurely.

 

     " Yes, Hollie, they can be very, very bad...." Mr. Johnson trailed off.

     

 " Buts! Buts, in the movies, the bloods and the shiny gun was sooooo pretty!" She exclaimed, begging him to understand her.

 

      Her last comment echoed through the silent classroom. It had turn disturbingly quite at her last comment. Mrs. Linden looked absolutely horrified, and so very frightened. Mr. Johnson however was smirking.

       He stared down his long, lean frame at Hollie.

You could see his green eyes glinting out of his widened sockets. They gleamed through his curtain of blond bangs.  They gleamed with such an intensity that it scared the kindergarden class. It scared the class almost as much as Hollie's statement had. 

Reviews

[Cynthia Man]

I like it a lot, I mean, I wasn't as shock to see her saying that, maybe because I'd seen kinds saying that in real life before, haha... But I think this is one very interesting story! I also like the end of the chapter, it's very absorbing!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

im rly glad you liked it!! I always aim to be very decriptive and suprising lol


read moreim rly glad you liked it!! I always aim to be very decriptive and suprising lol

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was interesting and a little creepy. No little four year old should ever speak like that, but I think this should be continued. It is entertaining. I think this little girl knows too much about guns. That's sad. This was nice though. Thanks for sharing.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Oh the little girl is about to learn a lot more about guns but dont worry it seems creepier thanit is ;-) i promise she won't turn into a psycotic killer though she is a teeny bit off. lol I'm glad you liked it! :-D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

posted the next chapter! u should check it out

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting and poignant little piece given the numbers of high school shootings over the years. Is this sentence right as I thought Mr Johnson was speaking:
" Well kids, Hollie's right but only partly" She pouted '

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Yes it was mr.Johnson you know cuz he's the speaker and all ....
I'm glad you liked it I am deffinately continuing it and you wont have guessed the turn it'll take I know exactly what I'm doing and you'll be really suprised!

[M Garcia]

How intriguing! This should be continued.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you I am planning on it!

[M Garcia]

Can't wait to read where you go with it! There seems to be a simpatico with Hollie and Mr. Johnson. An understanding.

[Tree]

Interesting and yes, a little creepy, too. You did a good job with the
dialogue and bringing to life the way little-ones talk. I liked it.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you like it!!

[Isobella Rose]

I really like it. I loved the twist at the end! It was creepy, but then again most four year olds don't know what they're saying. Looking forward to reading chapter two! :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanz Isobella! I'm glad you liked it :-)

[Michael Perez]

I love it. An unexpected twist made me read it again to make sure I read it right! NIce work. When she said "bloods" is made me laugh, but then I read the whole sentence, and THEN I finally freaked out! :P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol niiice! I'm glad you cared enough to understand alot of people wouldn't. I wanted to empahsize her youth and innocense yet at the same time leave her with a certain mystery and more than slight creepiness.

[_]

O geez that's freaky! :o But I'm used to it, when I was seven I wanted to be a dictator....yup I can relate.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I think alot of ppl can lol!

[PatrickBairamian]

I thought it was going to take a different turn, more cliche, but I was surprised! and very glad to be might I add. Great job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol im glad you were pleasantly suprised!! Hannah don't do "cliche" . :-P

[Mariah Corey]

I love it, really draws you in. Can't wait to read more. your end truly drew me in, very good. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx! lol thats always what I aim for in my first chapter

[Mariah Corey]

well great job. :D